OMG! I LOVE IT! IT'S THE BEST STORY EVER!

the only thing wrong that I find with this story is that Sesshomaru's hair isn't waist length but actually knee length and oh yeah he is only about 6 feet tall not 7... other than that this story is great...

Nice very nice

Akito reminds me of akito from fruits basket

The premise was interesting, however the construction was poorly made.
You should get a beta, perhaps it might help you.
Your writing has problems with not only spelling but also cohesion and coherence.

A pity. The idea was indeed really good.

Please please please get a beta, this is horribly written. Im not sure if it's because English is your second language or your just young but this is incredible difficult to read.
And that is a shame because this is a beautiful story and i really want to know what yoh had planned for it, but i cant do it when i feel as if i have to translate what i think your wanting to say.

This be interesting

Well I have to say little Kagome was precious. I enjoyed this story and version of the characters.

Sweet

Kagome sounded way too matured and adult for her 10 years of age in her dialogues with Sesshy in the forest when they first met and when she first came to the castle, with long sentences and eloquence speech. I guess, 10 years old tend to speak rather short in more innocence manner. Sorry if i was wrong. Kikyo was really a bitch, i was glad u did not prolong her role and she had not ended up with Inuyasha. Kaede sounded like a young /middle age woman when giving advice to Sesshy and i could not guess her age, when she called Sesshy as 'my friend'. Though she spoke wise, she did not sound like an old woman as i always knew her. You know, she always called others as 'child' that signified her age as an old woman. Other thing, sometimes i was confused and had a little mix up in the pronouns, esp when there got two person involved. Eg: There were Sesshy and Akito in the paragraph, i dont know the pronouns 'he' was refering to Sesshy or Akito. Kagome's age was a bit jumpy as you wanted to wrap up the story fast. From 12 to a sudden 16 years old. Actually, you could increase kagome's age gradually. I would prefer Kagome's age during the ballroom dance to be 14 or 15, and not 12. That suited her better as she started to attract another suitor. It's kinda weird Sesshy revealed to her suitor that he was making Kagome the future lady of the west and she was just 12 at the time. And i think, the part of Kohaku and Hojo confession in the second last chapter was not necessary as i prefered SessKag moment to be longer since you rushed up the ending. During the early part, this story got lengthy author's narration and less dialogue that made me wanted to yawn. Sorry. Entirely, this is a good story and i enjoyed every chapter. I would say, it worth the reading. Tq for posting.

Epilogue!

So much awesomeness :) love it

Fruits Basket.

Bro she 10

"One thing he had not been prepared for was the hero worship though it was nice to be addressed with the proper respect. Nobody feared him anymore though...he was still wondering whether or not that was a good thing." HAHAHAHA

"The Dai turned around and suppressed the urge to behead the man for touching his person the way he had. He hated people touching his shoulder to get his attention. He noticed though that it was Kagome's...father. He felt the urge to kill him just to knock him out of Kagome's life." LOL!

"I want to speak to you son" he said turning in the direction of his hut, jerking his head signalling for him to follow. While Sesshomaru raised his eyebrow at being addressed by this man who was several centuries his junior as 'son', he made no comment." Seriously ROTFL!

This chapter was frickin hilarious. I was tearing at the end..