Hi there! I'm sorry to say that I'm horribly canon-blind, but I shall do my best for you! Let's do this!

[Have you ever felt like you're forgetting something really important?] story of my life right here *nod* but in all seriousness, I really like this opening question and I also really like the sort-of thought-provoking responses that come from Dean, especially [every single day]. Something tells me there's much more to that answer than meets the eye.

Yay for senior year! That's a time of extreme changes, that's for sure. This right here [he keeps saying it] is honestly worded a little bit awkwardly to me, maybe try [he calls it] or something similar to it?

I have to say, I love how Dean is sorting his schedule so that he can get extra time to get out of school LOL. If we had study hall things like this in my school, I probably would've tried to do the same thing.

[there's someone in his cafeteria seat] Oh, my gosh, I giggled at this. I am so the same way - someone's in my seat? MOVE OVER PAL :) and HAHA, the logic behind why Dean can't let anyone take his seat! And oh, my, the next statement from the narrative had me in so much stitches! *wipes tears from eyes*

The character of Dean just has me giggling like a madman over here, I am so in love right now it's not even funny. And in a way, I like Jimmy's character, too; he reminds of myself. Quiet, reserved and more inclined to keep myself from extroverts like Dean. I really identify with him right now.

The gradual name change to Cas is a really endearing moment. I love it when characters do this and they don't notice it. Really warms my heart :) and also, the part where Dean goes to Jimmy's house and makes himself at home is just such a cute moment. Like 'hey buddy, your house is my house, too'! Love!

And here comes the full blown conversion to Castiel! I was waiting for this moment and it has finally arrived!

Oh, this ending...MY FEELZ! Though I don't know exactly what's happening/why, I really love the closing line of [give me something else to believe in]. I think everyone's had a moment in their lives where someone close to them is gone and all they want is something -anything- else to believe in to deal with what happened. A very deep, poignant ending, dear writer.

With this review, I believe your fic has graduated! Congratulations, you did a fantastic job! I'll see you later!

I heard of Supernatural and seen a little bit of the show. So I'm half fandom blind.
A very intriguing well-written piece. The character contrast friendship between Castiel and Dean really gave me a lot of ideas what kind of character they are. This story was more of a reflection drabble than a thought. Still, was worth my time reading a well goose-bump fic!

I like the way you portray the humanity in Jimmy Castiel. You open quite a scene, starting as a school. Jimmy Castiel, the innocent boy that becomes an unlikely friend with Dean. I was given the first impression that Dean was a real jerk.
For example, 'hey that seat is mine.' It's like he act as if he owns everything. Suggest that he is quite a snobbish area.
Moreover, you did draw the fact he had good and bad points about Dean. Like when he bought food for Jimmy because Jimmy is poor.
Jimmy once a school boy, the name becomes consume by the name 'Castiel'.
There is a lot of tension between them. I also like the fact you add minor characters such as Dean's siblings. Anna, Luke and Michael.
As for the title for this lovely one shot 'Make it right' - it really fits the story completely! Like the magic Jimmy thought to take away to make things right and tries to be human, that was wonderfully fit. Also, one of the lines that I like is Jimmy is like his anchor, the one with wings to shield Castiel but now no more. That was on the last paragraph about his mistake on magic and not being his shielding person.
Well done! I still feel the shivers of little horror through my veins!

Right, fandom blind, so I don't really know who this Castiel is or the whole deal about angels. Nevertheless, I can still enjoy the fic!
I always enjoy this style of writing; the dream-like, detached feel. I like how Dean intrudes on Jimmy's (Cas, whatever) life, it feels sort of natural, and you can see how and why it happens, even though Jimmy is reluctant.
The ending is good but I feel like you put in a lot of references to the show, so I didn't get it. Great fic and clever writing!
-Starluff

OH THIS IS SO PERFECT. I don't remember the last time I read a fanfic I enjoyed as much as this. I love the brevity of it and the way you pack so much meaning and so many implications about Dean and Cas and their relationship into almost strictly dialogue with a tiny bit of narration and then hold off on the big reveal until the last scene, yet it fits in so well with the foreshadowing and themes you've already established that it's a twist but it's not a radically-out-of-the-blue-doesn't-belong twist, and it's so perfect that the last scene is dialogue-driven so that you can't quite tell whether Cas remembered this as 'Jimmy' earlier back before this exchange takes place between them. I love that you've said so much in so few words and the way Cas's name just sort of emerges as their getting to know each other breaks down the barriers Cas set up and I LOVE your last line. I love it. For the same reasons - the conciseness and the impact - that I love the rest of that scene, and the rest of this story, and oh my god. I'm a babbling mess right now because I'm basically speechless. Wow.

Ooh, this was so cute! I thought this was just perfect. You stayed perfectly in character, and perfectly in the perspective for this story, which worked so well.

I really loved how Dean had just invited himself over to 'Jimmy's" house, and had just gone over to his house and told him he was sleeping over. And I loved how he was being so nice Cas, even though he didn't start that way.

And that everyone started calling him Cas, lol, that was great

The only thing that I saw wrong was that near the end, here, -"You were supposed to be my angel." "I know."- you need to put another line between them, because right now you're missing one, so it looks clumped up. ut other than that, it was perfect, to be perfectly honest. I loved it.

. For the Story of the Week thread at the Reviews Lounge, Too . . Fandom-blind .

The contrast in the beginning is intriguing, since I'm wondering which character will become inhuman, and whether that's meant literally or not as well... :O I like the way you portray Dean in the beginning; he seems rather overconfident and controlling, and that's quite chilling. I like that the other guy talks back to him as well; seems like Dean didn't expect, and didn't like, to be challenged. When Jimmy is asked by Dean to go somewhere with them during study periods, I was as intrigued as Jimmy as to why he asked, especially given their first encounter didn't seem too good. I like the quick development in their friendship as well, and since I'm fandomblind I'm wondering where the 'Cas' nickname is coming from. I found it quite funny when Dean sort of invited himself to Jimmy's house and then just sprawls out and makes himself comfortable. XD Jimmy's changes since meeting Dean are great, since I love seeing how friends influence one another; it's interesting that Jimmy is slowly becoming less and less of a good boy around Dean. XD Now I'm wondering if Castiel is a friend of his who has left him or passed on, and that Jimmy is a reminder of this friend he misses so much. Their friendship is very well conveyed in the way Jimmy can see right through him; although Dean calls his little brother names, Jimmy can see he's still very proud. When they have the discussion on when life just doesn't feel right, I found it advanced their growing friendship nicely, since it seems like they're starting to confide in each other. Aww, the way Castiel's hand fits the scar seems like a symbol of them being the perfect friends pair, at least to me. I love the seemingly-distant nature of the end dialogue, since the lack of dialogue tags gives the conversation a bit of an awkward flavour. I like the gradual forgiveness, as opposed to a full-on forgiveness, since it hints that things will improve slowly between them and that seems more realistic. Great job. :) I have no concrit for this, but keep up the good work. :)

I've never watched the show, but I do know a little about Supernatural. I know Sam, Cas, and Dean, and I really liked the way you did this. I never knew Cas' first name was Jimmy, or did you just do that for the story? Because the way you write this, it's like everything that happens in the show is isn't reality. Or it is, and it's more like it was a dream, and they're not sure if it happened or not. But as I said, the concept really works. I really like how Dean seems to be the only one who calls him Cas, but other people tend to adopt it as well because he likes it better. And then the thing with the handprint was just awesome...like it confirms that their dreams are actually reality. The ending was really lovely. I thought it worked perfectly. I really enjoyed this. Well done. :)

Oh my goose pimples, this story is flippin' amazing!
I was honestly blown away.

It's sweet. It's simple. But it holds so much meaning that surrounds Dean and Castiel. Admittedly, I was never a huge Supernatural fan, but the few times I did watch the show, it was great. Seeing an author bring to life two characters in such a simpler setting was just inspiring.

First, your flow is spot on. I truly enjoyed how everything transitioned so easily. Sometimes when I read and/or write stories, it's all about complication and explain this and explain that. You put everything so simply that it just works.

"D'you like it better?" Jimmy considers it, realizing that he really hasn't before, and that should be telling him something. "Yes," he says.

This is a perfect example. It just is what it is and because of the back story and knowledge of the canon story of these characters, I just end up nodding my head and going "yeah."

The talk of their dreams and the world that was, this is a lovely touch. I found so many different meanings to it. They're the Yin and Yang. Two different beings that just balance each other out perfectly. And because this is a one shot, there is no need to create a struggle between characters. It's like being lost and finding home again. They found each other. And because of that, I love the way you chose to end the story.

"I can understand trying to put things right, and screwing it up. I...I think I can forgive you."

That really did it for me. Just lovely. Two friends destined to be a part of each others lives though not the same as it once was. And the strength of the bond that is their friendship and how even after all that has changed, they can still forgive, and they can still move forward together.

I did find the last two sentences before the final piece of the dialogue a little confusing/off. It seemed a little awkward for Castiel to kneel down, but have Dean pull him back up to stand in that short of a time. I'm not sure why, but it didn't flow quite like the rest of the story. But it was rather minor in comparison to everything as a whole. I feel it did not have an impact on the overall quality.

Anywho, thank you so much for writing this. Great read!

Hi! Hi!

Fandom blind so don't bite me if I don't have canon knowledge... and I'm replying as part of RLt's story of the week thread.

Unlike the person prior to me, I love this opening scene. You did well in showing that the character Dean isn't just some rude jerk, nit really a bully but likes life/statuses/things to stay the same... his reaction to the kid actually looking confused to rhetorical question and Dean saying he could sit there and asking him about his homeroom teacher was wonderful...

Its the characterization that he may be a bit of a jerk, but he's actually kinda cool and a caring person.. I think it was a fine way to introduce the character, his mindset, and personality into the story.
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You further this characterization with the following scene without explicitly stating it, good job showing rather than telling.

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I don't know if you've ever seen "The Melancholy of Haruhi Suzumiya" but when Dean asks about wheyher he'd wished those supernatural things were real... it made me chuckle and remindsed of the show that I just mentioned. Its also a nice relation to the canon story that this AU is based off of. I liked that.
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In the end, the friendship of these two was powerfully portrayed. I enjoyed it a lot. I thought this was ab excellent story.

The one thing that I think could help was that final scene... I think a bit more description will help a lot. It feels a bit vague... nit sure if that was on purpose. Your writing kept my attention the entire time despite me nit really knowing the characters. I loved how, in such a story, you were able to develop these characters... which isn't easy. I recently did that in my interlude of a chapter j recently wrote... and the idea stressed me out.

Awesome job,
Until Next Time,
Neo

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Fandom blind, but here goes:

Alright, nice set up with the quotes, it tells me something is "up" for lack of a better term.

I will say that I developed an instant, vehement dislike for Dean from his first action ("you're in my seat") and that only increased as the story went on. Kudos if that was you're intention.

I also find the present tense weird. Not necessarily bad, but weird.

Also, nice, slow but clear buildup to the twist.

You know, as soon as I noticed that this was in the present tense, I assumed that you'd screw it up and switch into the past. I was shocked when you maintained it perfectly for the entire story. There *are* places where your lack of contractions and comma placement make your narration sound stilted ("Then there is a lot of loud noise as they get reacquainted after a summer apart, and are joined by more people"). It was hard to notice after awhile, though, because I got caught up in the story.
At first it seemed as though you were doing a straight-up metaphorical human AU, but as you shifted one tiny detail after another, it became less certain. I'll admit to HUGE canon blindness, but I think that you meant for it to be hard to tell why Dean was acting as he was, and whether or not he was doing so on purpose. The ending wasn't pathetic and overwrought (thank you!), giving the story a sense of emptiness and emotional numbing. I'd never read something from this fandom normally, but I'm glad I read this.

I'm going to start with the obligatory "I don't read Supernatural highschool AUs" - but holy crap, I love this. I liked how from the start there was some force pulling Dean and Castiel together; they're strangers in this universe, as far as they know, yet they're drawn to each other.

I loved how you slowly eased the readers into the twist. You didn't make it obvious from the start. Dean and Jimmy!Cas start their friendship by meeting each other in a school cafeteria and there's really no indication that they already know each other, but they've just forgotten. The care that you took to build up Cas' family, the descriptions of Michael and Anna, and then the description about the type of home life that Dean has at home with John and Sam - the implication of the life they might have had if John hadn't kept them on the road their whole lives and if they weren't hunters - was really well done. It added great depth to the story.

My favourite part was the subtlety of how you lead the readers into the twist - Dean just calls him "Cas" randomly out of the blue and neither the characters or the readers are really sure why. We're given the impression that something is out of place, but we're not quite sure. I thought it was brilliantly done.

My only criticism for this piece is on the last section. I felt that after slowly building towards the plot twist, the ending snippet was very abrupt. I also found it a bit confusing. Dean and Castiel suddenly remember part of their old life, and we learn that Cas tried to make things better - but we don't know why. Why did Cas have to remake the world? Was it the apocalypse? Was it Lucifer? And are the people other than Cas and Dean in this world real people - is Sam really Sam? Is John really John?

Overall, I thought it was a very lovely piece.

Hi :) I've seen about half an episode of Supernatural, but I can figure it out that this is an AU... and one quite well done, IMHO. I felt that I was sort of being thrown in the deep end at the beginning with little context or grounding, however, that's possibly just my lack of canon-fu talking, and I like the pace that this ficlet moves at. The hell/heaven balance in their conversation is brilliant, with the words flowing in a masterful way, and I laughed about "big plans for that fish."

Well done x

Oh, I like this! :)

I really like where you took this AU, because it's so different from any other all human Supernatural AUs around.

Your characterization of Dean was perfect. All his reactions were exactly what the Dean we know and love would have done, so well done on that one!

I like how you modified the angel names to fit "regular" naming standards, like Luke for Lucifer, though I do wish you had included more of the angelic family in this.

The ending was lovely, the way that Cas destroyed and remade the entire world because he lost Dean, if only because I like to believe that's exactly what canon Cas would do, given the chance.

This was wonderful, and I lovelovelove the little hints of a Destiel relationship at the end.
All in all, wonderful sort-of-fluff, a genre which perfectly fits the two of them.

Well done! :)

In all, I liked the premise of the story and enjoyed the tale for the sweet piece of Destiel fluff it was designed to be. I loved how you showed the friendship between Dean and Castiel. I loved how you had Dean call Jimmy by Cas's name and not really know why he did it. I also think that you did an awesome job on capturing Dean and Cas not only character wise, but friendship-wise as well. You really gave me a sense of how tied together these two really are. Some lines I wanted to point out that I love were:

(("Do you ever feel like things aren't right?" Castiel asks. It's the first of many conversations that go this way. "Like someone's taken your real life and tilted it just ever so slightly and put it back wrong?"))-I think this sums up how a lot of humans feel on a daily basis. Really ties the story together and alludes to what is coming in the end.

((Dean asks Castiel what he dreams about.

"Angels," Castiel answers after a pause. "A million billion heavens. Two thousand years. A voice - my brother's - telling me 'don't step on that fish, Castiel. Big plans for that fish'. And - I dream about you. About Falling."

Dean is silent for a long time. "I dream about forty years in Hell," he says, "Ghosts and monsters in the darkness, deals with demons at a crossroads. And flying, I always dream about flying. You have wings, and you're holding me up, right here," he grips his left shoulder.

After that day, a burn scar that looks like a hand print appears there, and they don't tell anyone.

Castiel's hand fits it exactly, like he's the one that put it there.))-I really like how you tie the Dean and Cas we know into this sequence, summing up the majority of their lives. Good job. And I like how you have Dean ask Cas what he dreams about. Seems like a bit of a paradox in a way, asking an angel if he dreams, but it works because it makes you wonder if they do or do not.

Now for some critiques:

I don't have any points about grammar or edits here so much as a commentary upon why I feel like I didn't love this story more. My main problem is that I felt that you kinda just dumped me into things without giving me a bit more of a lead into the direction you are trying to go. You go from here: (("Have you ever felt like you're forgetting something really important, and no matter how hard you try you can't remember what?" Castiel asks.

"All the time," Dean replies. "Every single day.")) Which gives me a premise of something that is going on and is important, without cluing me into the something that is going on and which is important. A lead off that you are building from the events of Sacrifice or just that Cas is trying to make repairs for what he'd done to Dean (going Godly, Sam's wall, dying, returning, going insane, purgatory and abandoning him to taking the angel tablet and running) without telling me the end ( or telling the end and working backwards to tell me the beginning) would have worked to make this area stronger for me. If you had done that and then taken me on a spin back in time to them being in high school I'd have applauded and gone "right on". But this is just my opinion.

Minor complaint: character continuity- at the beginning you make it seem like Cas knows what is going on, but later, when Dean starts calling him Cas you have him acting like he doesn't have a clue about why Dean is doing this.

Example of what I am talking about 1: (("I am sorry," the guy says, with none of the usual awkwardness. "I didn't know there were assigned seats."))-I sense that Cas not only knows who they are, but that he's aware he's manipulating this.

Example 2: (("Hey, Cas!" Dean calls, jogging up to Jimmy in the hall.

Jimmy turns, feeling something buzz through his skin that isn't his cell phone on silent. "What did you call me?" he asks.))-Kinda doesn't flow right to me. But I could be overanalyzing things.

Minor complaint: you mention Crowley and then have no appearance of the guy...really coulda made for an interesting scene if you had. Personally, I would drop the Crowley reference and give the Chem teacher some science nerdy name.

I seriously think this story could be awesome with just a little bit of work. Again, I did love the premise of the story and enjoyed the story for what it was. And I found the idea of Cas trying to fix things only to have them keep going wrong to fit in well with the theme on Supernatural (Cas has been making mistake after mistake since Season 6 after all). I just needed a little more to push this story over the top.