That was really good for ur first time writing smut. Keep doing it. Pleaseeee update!

1.) What is your favorite color? My favorite color is pink and red

2.) Should I make Ron be a filthy hypocrite and start to like Millicent? (If you remember she was named his soul mate earlier on in the story)yes

3.) What is your favorite song ever? keke palmer the one you call

5.) Last one, do you prefer the shorter chapters like in the beginning or longer like now? (I know it's not that long but it is much longer than the original chapters.) Longer

I love your concept, but the writing is subpar and I think you really need to get a beta Nice idea though!

Yes, more details are good.

Whore, not hoar. Fun story, though.

Phase, not faze

For me I think she accepted way to fast I mean these guys have picked on her and been racist in the past why would be willing to hang out with them

Apostrophes. They're an important part of life. Let's see if your fic is worth reading anyway.

So, I love, love, LOVE this story. There are some grammar issues though and I would suggest using a beta when you write your story. I am a beta so maybe that's why I catch the errors but believe me I'm not trying to degrade your storytelling in any way. Most writers I know, including myself, use beta's. It's just having a second pair of eyes for those pesky grammar and spelling errors. By the way you spelled Grimmauld correctly, just thought I would let you know because you had the question in parenthesis.

If you decide to look for a Beta you can find a list of them by clicking on the link at the top of the web page.

Time to commence PHASE 1 of the plan... last line! :* loving the story

I laughed so hard at Draco's dare! That's awesome!

1. My favorite colors are blue and silver or green and silver (I'm a Slytherin)
2. I persoally hate Ron, so I would like nothing more than to make him miserable but it's your story :)
3. My favorite song ever is Hero by: Enrique Iglesias
4. I am not a guy so I can't help you there!
5. I personally prefer longer chapters but I love anything as long as it's well written (which yours is!)

The all caps for the yelling is highly unnecessary. We'd get the idea with just a couple of exclamation points. It's actually quite annoying to see so much all caps.

Also you should try to make your chapters a little longer. They're so short that they really have no point or direction, and they barely make any progress in the plot.

Madam Pomfrey?

So, both men are bi?