The 2-nd person POV fits the story _perfectly_. I have no complaints at all on it whatsoever, especially the way the details of the world are simply a faded wash in the background while the people and the little things they do stood stark. It reminds the readers that it is not strictly reality that they're seeing, it's memories, either past or still in the process being formed, but in the end ethereal and passing. Not to mention the progression of perspectives as experience and age caught up with Garrus. Time indeed felt relative.

The second thing that stood out to me was the acceptance of death in the final scene, how for all everyone is hoping for the best, Garrus was realistic enough to know what the most probable outcome against overwhelming forces in the Reaper war was for a while. He had made his peace with it. It could've been something insignificant for someone else, but since I'm not much of an angst person, finding a well-written story where the characters actually made peace with death was a breath of fresh air. Especially since the war had obviously been going on for a while, and things haven't been looking up in the interim. Just... thanks for doing that.

best 2nd POV fic I've ever read

Normally the present tense, second person POV does bother me. But this was really good! I was pleasantly surprised. Loved it!

This.. yes. This is perfect. the second person worked amazingly for this. Damn. I can't think of a single thing I didn't like about it, in fact I had tears in my eyes by the end.

I'm ... this is amazing. Very nicely done.

I'm a bit overwhelmed.

Very well written, and an enjoyable read. The second person viewpoint actually fits the tone of the story very well.

enjoyed it - didn't at all mind the second person, thought you pulled it off quite well :)

Loved it.

Nice, short, and sweet. I must fall into the 25% who absolutely love this writing style when it's pulled off correctly. To me, it's wonderfully immersive in a very direct and concise manner. Speaks to the actor in me, and it lends easily to setting up internal dialogue and conflict. As much as I like reading good dialogue, I love reading good soliloquy's, and your story certainly qualifies.

Some critique: it's "on point", not "at point," but that's minor, didn't detract from it at all. I kind of want to see a little more about your Shepard, simply because fan-fic centered around an AFGNCAAP changes greatly depending on the characterization of said character. At the same time, it's tough to work in other character's thoughts or personality into a 2nd-person perspective.

Sadly, it looks like the plot of Arrival may mess with your last section, but it's written pretty well nonetheless. Bravo, and keep it up )

~ Ferrard