Great story, very realistic. love the detail

Aw, this was SO sad! Kally's being so brave, and she'll never even get the glory she deserves from it.

Oh my gosh that almost made me cry! I might even write something along those lines! It was so sad! I really hate Jon right now! peace

:( Aw. That just broke my heart. A nine-year old succumbing fact she will have to marry a stranger and give up her dream to defend Tortall. To even live in Tortall. Hurts my heart to read this.

this is so sweet and sad. plucks at the heart strings. you have a good thing going with your use on imagry. VERY effective

Why do brilliantly written stories always tend to end so sadly? :(

I really love most of your portrayal of Jon. I might not necessarily like him here, but he is so, absolutely like he is portrayed in PotS 'for the greater good'. One thing that did irk me a little was that Jon's always shown a propensity to find a way around 'the terrible choice' (like letting Kel be put on probation in a compromise when everyone else was yelling on one side or another) and I imagine he would try even harder here. I guess it just couldn't be done since Kalasin did not actually become a knight.

Oftentimes, we must be cruel to be kind. Beautiful as always: I loved your characterization here. Thank you for sharing!

This is so sad! I don't like Jon at all here, and I usually find a lot to like about him. Structurally, this was really good. I think you repeated the thing about the wings and thorns quite often near the end of the one-shot and it may have been better had you cut out one reference, but other than that the language was beautiful. Good job!

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Excellent story. Her excitement at the beginning was so palpable and the way you wrote it really made it real to us. Thanks for writing. x

Ah, so Jon is again showing his true colors. This was a very sad oneshot (I felt a combination of anger, disgust and sorrow burn in my gut as I read it) but you wrote it very well. I know she's a princess but there had to be another way really. Great job!