Good story! The ending felt a little rushed (like a combo between Romeo and Juliet or yes, the Little Mermaid). Thank you :)

To tell the truth, my guts were telling me near the end: Liora's gonna die, Liora's gonna die, Liora's gonna die, over and over again. Though I didn't expect her parents to show up at the last part though. Nice touch!

Oh My God! I loved that so much! I hope you got an A on your english assignment!

WOW. I loved your rewrite and I also like that it didn't end happy, because in that time frame a lot of things didn't. I think you took these two very different stories and made one GREAT cohesive story. Fabulous job. :)

NOOOOOO! SO SAD! DX
But great too. :) I think it had a better ending than the original story. A much better way to die I think. In the arms of your lover. And not in jealousy of another girl with your lover. Much better. :) :)

I liked it but I don't like the ending. It's to sad. Pretty good for a short story though

That was so sad. Shame it wasn't a happy ending. :/

:O I think you made me cry...that's so so so sos sad!

it would explain why Sirius was never with a girlfriend though...
great writing ability!

AWESOME..BAD ENDING THO..

so sad :(

O my gosh, I had tears in my eyes by the end of this...very well written, great take on the mermaid tale! O and did I mention that I !Love! the marauder take on this?

d'aww. thats all i can say. d'aww

Soulful dreamer,

This has to be the best Fanfiction story, no best written short story i have ever read!

Just the way you write and your characters are amazing, and the idea is original! its great to be able to read a fanfiction that hasn't been written a million times before, not that they are bad the storys are good and its nice to read the different views people take on it, but i really loved this!

Please don't stop writing you have a gift :D

actually, it's not Anderson, that's Swedish. His name is Hans Christian Andersen. With an E, as in Anders' son.

"Anders' søn " in danish...

it's good. It's really good. At first i was thinking that the deal wasn't eternal servitude - that was an idea of the movie. But then i got to the end and it's really good. I mean, the original had a happy ending but it's still really good.