Awww... that tore at my heart somethig fierce, but nicely written! :)

Oh, this is so sad, but the ending is a bit confusing. Did he just pass out or is he dead?

Oh. My. Gosh.

I loved it! D

Stuff like this should happen in the manga.

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btw, you did a pretty awesome job! bd

Don't die Yoshi D':

awww poor yoshi:( i like that you have gen in this, i still like to believe he is alive. good story.

ohhhh damn. that was intense. though it is a one-shot, hope you can write additional chapters

Something like this should happen in the real anime

So Tokine would realize how truly important Yoshimori is

Right xP?

Well anyways, I really liked this Really descriptive and everything

Keep it up!

-Mayrasaur