yeah.. i think you got AU Sasuke part alright. hes such a self centered drama queen... and the the set up to his demise was well written.. but youve sort of broke something.. like that is ONE BIG DEAL of a development.. nagato became Pein when Yahiko died.. Obito became Tobi/'Madara' when Rin was killed.. Sasuke's death should totally turn Naruto into 12tailed beast mode (..which means.. doomsday for the shinobi world.. oh well) ...

But i guess youve got Naruto's and Sakura's fixation on Sasuke turned down a notch... and i totally agree to that. canon Sai was right... Sasuke's like the curse mark Danzo gave him. lol. ouch.

also.. damn boi... got interogated by the father.. and dating the daughter after.

so.. by now. Konoha's intel should have parts of info from the akatsuki.. AND Sai's identity being the younger brother of a certain future Daimyo of the Ayatsuru clan from the land of the keys..

is that ever gonna come up...

i dont get this chapter with how lenient theyre handling a STILL missing-nin of Iwagakure.. i mean.. as long as hes not back to his original shinobi village he'll always be treated as a rogue-nin; hunted by their village ANBU.

aww.. a little NaruHina SaiIno inserts...

i dont get this chapter with how lenient theyre handling a STILL missing-nin of Iwagakure.. i mean.. as long as hes not back to his original shinobi village he'll always be treated as a rogue-nin; hunted by their village ANBU.

aww.. a little NaruHina SaiIno inserts...

why you gotta bring that silver permed into this story.. shit made me choke on the thought... that stupid face that stupid voice was a strong one. lmao

Kiba's mom. i love her. a sassy spunk savage kunoichi.

also.. nice little jab at pinky and blondie..

and konoha's beast duos making their entrance like a huge ball of sunshine of YOUTHHHH! i miss these two..

also. WHAT THE FRIGGIN ...F... ugh.. being Raidan's puppet is nothing compared to THIS. this is just wrong... nasty wrong...

that was.. man. great death scene.. did not expect that.. i knw Sasuke was volatile.. but that was one fckn brutal execution. ..and then going on describing a man's death face from his best pal's pov who'd just witnessed the striking blow himself... the feels. phew..

then theres that part about Raidan. ha. jutsu's of his hat he used to bully taunt and torture his puppet came right around and bit him. pure satisfaction.

ah... kakashi giving a poke at his friends/subordinatesnicker...) is always a satisfying comedy gold.. especially when icha icha novels is involved..

Im really cursing over Raidan as i say this.. man im in love with this character. hes normal and civil-like one time.. and a raging mad sadist the other. ...how i like my villain so..

what im really in love is the contrast and it's depth in youre delivery of Raidan's sides... that was awesome.

im still hung up on hidan and kakuzu's death. theyre so fun to hv the protagonist interacts with. sigh.

awww.. few chapters ago Deidara had a knife on Sai's throat.. next they went to adoreable sweet moments like this; Having him reminded of Shin while being around Deidara ...my heart just did a backflip...

in canon, Sai mentioned that he specialised in chakra manipulation... he could totally go for chakra control in basic level medic ninjutsu..

brilliant plan my ass.. that totally backfired. lol.

well done with this chapter. that was indeed a tough match up to write. plus Deidara with a broken arm?

im really really enjoying how you write your fighting scenes. im totally satisfied with the result.. plus Sai's confrontation with Naruto is exactly how i imagine it would be.. minus the part he asked Naruto of all ppl to do the unthinkable.. he could beg on his knees and plead him for 1000 time.. it's still impossible. tbf he was desperate and out of option..

with that said.. im glad tht the protag hadnt totally step into the dark side. hes still thinking about konoha and stuff to some extent. but really.. poor Ryoko..

another intense ending.
there are parts that i found as unneeded. and dragging unnecessarily.. like that part Deidara was pouring his heart out making him OOC mushy and cringe.. but in contrast.. the good stuff is hella captivating! how do you come up with this stuff..

making Sai's injuries exactly how Naruto would take it.. theyre torturing the poor thing! and..damn... that last part was brutal but smart thinking on Deidara's part.. i mean knocking Sai out and using him in a hostage situation.. if he was awake.. hed probably run to Naruto's side in a heartbeat; a perfect moment with Raidan cutting off his chakra link.

*my english is unbearable.. sorry. english not my first lgguage.

also.. Raidan that psychotic asshole. man..