This is great. Why is Dearie so mean to Harry? He knows Petunia, right? Or did I misunderstand?
When Snape did the analysis to do the nutritive potions, etc. didn't he see that Harry was underweight? How do you continue to abuse a neglected child?

This is very disjointed.
The 1st chapter was very promising but after that, the story doesn't seem to know what it wants to be. Especially this last chapter.

I hate all of the original characters. Your story would be better without them.

This story is so confusing, and I thought this was severtius - not muggle-Harry-and-a-lot-of-OC's. Sorry, but this seems kinda chaotic

I am absolutely confused about this story

Interesting

this makes no sense - sorry

Good to see a new update. Wonder what Dearie boy's problem is, has he just been listening to Snape for the last two years about what Harry is like? It's a little weird he's got all these preconceptions about Harry and is making a huge fuss about everything Harry does. By the way, in Britain, we have Primary school and then High school, not elementary and definitely no middle school. And where did Harry get Latin from, this summer school or Hogwarts? Because Latin's not exactly a normal subject anymore, I wouldn't have thought a casual summer school would have one.

Wonder if Dan will mention Dudley, be interesting for Harry to hear about his cousin from someone who has no idea who Harry is. At some point, Harry will need to go to Diagon Alley, will he get to see Ron and Hermione then? I don't suppose they are likely to meet Dan and Sally but that would be interesting. Looking forward to more.

Excellent start (the first two chapters I mean; couldn't review after chapter two). I am really looking forward to a lot of chapters in the future! :)

Love this story
But the page brakes are messing up
The vewing abilatys on my phone
The go off the page and it makes it hard to keep my place

I don't mean be rude I gust thought
I should let you know

From me: vee

Oh wow from reading
chapter one it already seems like
this is going to be an awesome story

From me: vee

Uhg...

Why do so many people write stories where I wqould drown
their Harry than anything else?
I hope this isn't another pathetic loser Harry story.

I probably read this wrong but is Harry going back to Hogwarts? If he's not, shouldn't be be kicking up one hell of a fuss?

good but your scene breaks are too long and distort the page the readers view the example below shows one that would work just as well:

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Just set it in the middle