This was so...so...AHFSJKHSJKD. I LOVE IT. IC, and it all makes sense. I love this, so much! You have a talent for writing, my friend.

Keep writing, always! :)

~Different

you're totally right. this IS what should have happened. if only it did.

That was great! I'm just like you! How could JP make Fang leave? Did he not realize that thousands of teenage girls cried at that point! ...then again he probably did. Girrrrrrrrr. Anyway update soon!

Very, very nice.

It flowed nicely, and wasn't overly sappy. I think Fang was in character, which is REALLY a rarity, seeing as even JP couldn't keep his character straight.

Anyway, I actually liked it when you put words together without any space, such as "soarflyglidedive". It fit nicely, and just... worked.

Perfectly done. I didn't see any grammar mistakes.

Keep it up,

Project Aero.

-The Willing Scribe

I really loved this! I think you should continue it. But that is up to you. Keep writing! )

YES! Fang would never leave, because Fang is epic.

Keep writing please (:

I loved it. I lovelovelove it ) The summary caught my eye, because it's so true, and then the first line was very good, and yes, there were a lot of rhetorical questions, but that's okay.

I really liked the moments when you would write "soarflyglidelive" and "blueblue" and the lone, no-pause sentences. I feel like they characterized Fang, sort of showed how he's always thinking and calculating, even if he's quiet on the outside. Or it's just your writing style. Either way.