To put it politely your spelling and grammar are crap.

that was good

Your grammar and spelling are horrible. The story line is rushed and over the top high school level drama. You made Rose into a pathetic bitch.

Please update

Keep updating Your story's they are fantastic

funny how a simple "im sorry" makes dimitiri a wonderful god again..and she just trusts him and thinks he'll be there forever now he left you before rose cause things were hard he'll fucking do it again.

why did you have her forgive his stupid ass so easy? its like he can do whatever he wants as long as he says im sorry afterwards...PURE BULLSHIT

I don't like that you brought Sydney into this...I know its for Adrian but god I never liked her for him shes just a stupid slow weak human Adrian deserves better and if he really loves rose he wont fall for that stupid blond right away

why would you have rose embarrassing herself like that...? just laughing was fine but that comment just made her look stupid and then saying shit about talking someones man got she looked like such an idiot...your grammar sucks serious balls by the way... and stop having her be mean to Adrian its a wonder why anyone likes rose the way you have her acting and seriously we get it he left her for another woman so stop talking about it over and over

ya that makes all the sense in the world doesn't it. I don't want to ruin your future so im leaving to fuck Tasha...yup that's love all right. I say he can have Tasha...if Adrian wants rose lets give her to him!
fuck dimitir

why do you keep saying hurted...it hurted
does that even sound right to you? um no sooooo stop it

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wtf!?...!

Aww! I love this story so much! Please try to make one more chapter. Even if it is just an end one. Something to finish the story off. There are very very little mistakes. It seems near perfect to me!

Hi Marina,
i really hope that you do continue on with this journey, it is truly awesome and i have missed following it. there is so much happening, so much drama, suspense and anxiety.

reading your story has bought out so many emotions in me from sadness, frustration, annoyance and down right anger. these are just some of the feelings/emotions that your writings have bought out in me. the things that rose has had to endure are just incredible and heartbreaking from when her mother left her at the academy to the very present dramas. it takes a very talented writer to be able to do this. your story is a roller coaster of emotions and drama!

Dimitri himself has had to go through a lot as well, having said this Dimitri is far older and should at some point be able to process and deal with such dilemmas, where as rose is only 17 turning 18? has had to deal with so much in such a short period of time for one so young.

Rose has had to grow up very quickly handling more adult responsibilities than most adults, not only taking care of herself but also Lissa. Rose did not have the loving, nurturing family upbringing like Dimitri and Lissa yet Rose is always looked upon for strength and protection. Rose i think is incredibly strong and im sure that Rose can be forgiven if at some point she loses control-this makes her a very mature, strong and passionate person and of course her "young" personality has to come out as she is 18...

Dimitri at times can be so bloody frustrating, he almost lost rose when he left to be with Tasha. this in itself should have taught dimitri a lesson and what he almost risked loosing than. now Dimitri is engaged and about to become a father and again Dimitri has allowed one of his ex-girl friends come between him and Rose-again he has risk far too much for what?

Dimitri has already admitted to himself in his pov that he could see through Mary's fake tears and her glaring at Rose, Dimitri should have at this point put Rose first and put Mary in her place and by not doing so Dimitri has let Rose down this is so close/borderline to betraying Rose, if Dimitri didn't see what Mary was up to than Dimitri could be accused of being blind but we know different.

Dimitri i think really needs to man up and prove that he is in fact worthy of rose and his unborn child. when reading what Dimitri said to Rose i thought then to myself that Rose shouldn't allow Dimitri so easily back into her life. sure Dimitri had a lot on his mind with Victor escaping but what he said was belittling, demoralizing, humiliating and embarrassing and all this said in front of Mary to which would have broken Rose far more than if Mary was not there.

Dimitri has wonderful personality, brilliant standards, morals, beliefs and a strong sense of right and wrong, Olena has done a wonderful job in raising her children. however Dimitri needs to know where and when to draw the line and not at the expense of Rose. if the tables were turned and Rose allowed Adrian, or Eddie or Christian to do what Dimitri's ex girlfriends have done im sure that dimitri would have ended up punching a couple of faces! but as we know Rose hasn't had ex's running around making trouble.

you certainly opened a can of worms with story. firstly it started off with Tasha making trouble compelling Lissa and Adrian, but now Avery is in the scene causing her own trouble, Victor has escaped who has now abducted Rose-WOW...

Not sure how this all plays out whether Avery compelled Tasha to break out Victor or whether Avery done it herself? is Avery compelling not Lissa but Tasha as well? there are just too many theories to try to think about, well too many to type up here and there are many that i do have.

there may be error's in your work but not enough for the story to be un-enjoyable, many authors on this site have made many errors some have made far more. though you have to feel content with what you put out there as this is your baby, your project and you want it to be as best as it can be. not sure it you have someone to help you with editing, if not, i am sure there are many who would love to help you out with this. whether it is to give you ideas, suggestions/advice as well as to help out with grammar and spelling.

again a fantastic story and i do hope that you will continue. make changes as needed but remember our first work is not always our best and part of the fun is learning as we travel along in our journeys. learn from these mistakes to ensure that your new journeys will be far greater. it would be such a shame if you finished this journey without completing it. looking forward to your next update. take care.