# cheesy ending

too much cliche!

Such a fluffy story...I LOVED IT!
Happy Writing on any current or future works of yours!

ummmm its a nice story though it is kinda tacky no offence

i know how u feel...i cant describe it too XD

Ya know ? Your story was good, and I laughed to death about your reason there was no kissing. And what the hell you mean by entrance ?! I was laughing out loud ! ( TIP : for me, Natsu's personality is not quite right in your story, he should be a bit embarrassed, but nevermind ! I loved it ;)

I laughed...
Please be realistic...

how bout this:
under the starlit sky, her lips glisined, her hair shined in the moon light, & her eyes sparkled like the shine of dew on a rose. he wanted to hold her and make her his, but surely she didn't love her best friend, did she? he pulled her close to him. it started as a hug and turn into something more as their lips met, relising under the night sky the were ment 4 each other. it was true love,& they new it.

i call that 'star light kiss.' It's a NatsuxLucy or a NaLu fanfic i made on the spot. :)

goooood story. i hope i helped w/the kissing parts. she is Lucy he is Natsu. :DDDDDDDDDDD

Good plot, but horrible grammar...no offense.

I do love the plot of the fiction ... But I guess I saw a little errors but keep it up! :D And I think the fict is too short. D;

I really liked it. :)

Just some little errors, but really good. :3