I've read bloodlines too! Amazing book! Great story too!

3 and :)
Foxy

Hey moron, your timeline for this is totally messed up! Avatar came out after this quest!

What you would do in the first book is totally lame. I mean Percy wouldn't be able to meet any of the Romans and then Gaia would destroy the world all thanks to you and your stupid mind.

This is a great fanfic. I look forward to reading the sequel

Final Verdict:
1.5 out of 10.

Absolutely no changes from canon.
Vast amounts of verbal text taken directly from the book.
Meh characterization.
No discernible character development.
No drama, no real feeling.
Bland text.
Left with a serious sense of disappointment.

The ending was ok, when she finally left the Percy Jackson verse having accomplished...nothing.

The vast majority of Percy Jackson stories that take place during canon are canon rehashes. Sadly, this was no different.

I'm sorry, but this is very, very boring. I just can't get through reading what's nothing more than a rehash of Percy Jackson. You're literally copying straight from the book most of the time, and turning Max into a third wheel.

Not to mention that I'm pretty sure two people can't hold up the sky at the same time.

Disappointing. I mean, you say that it will get better later when Max is dealing with her own problems? That's pretty much an admittance that you have no intention of changing Percy Jackson canon, which is both illogical and very boring.

At the very least, you could not copy directly from the book. Even different dialogue with the same meanings would be more interesting.

Decent. But really, REALLY could stand to not be largely copied straight from the book in regards to talking. Like 99% of the other Percy Jackson fanfics that take place during canon.

Speaking of which, it could also REALLY use some actual changes from canon.

It was good the opening makes you sound like you have alot of wisdom.

Ouch. That hurt. a LOT

Angel was full of shit. Maya is a piece of crap. I hate her so much.

After I read this chapter, I felt like shipping Max x Will. But Fax is my one true ship!

Cool. I have no improvements to tell you here, :-)

COOL! I agree, Thalia and Max are totally the same... Ahh, sarcasm sweet sarcasm.

This is really good. Thanks for not making Max a girly girl like all those other fanfics do. I hate when people do that! Max is supposed to be kicking butt, not obsessing about looks!