Oh so sad but thanks for the read

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Wow this was beautiful!

I just wanted to let you know that I greatly enjoy all of your Mentalist stories. I have read them over and over and each one is beautiful and poignant and so, so perfect. These fics were a major component in convincing me to write more for The Mentalist, so I just wanted to thank you for posting these amazing stories. They are truly awe-inspiring.

*sobs uncontrollably*

Flawless. Maybe the best/saddest/sweetest Jisbon story ever.

I think one of the things that I like most about your writing is the unique style and your use of action verbs and language. Going back through some of your stories, I think that really shines through.

You are a fantastic addition to the fandom. I hope you write more soon :)

You know, I wasn't exactly sure about the style of this one. Then I got to the last line and it suddenly all worked. I'm really liking your writing style. It's different, but I like it.

Beautiful once again! I really adore your lovely little angsty/romance things. You always strike such a wonderful balance.

As a suggestion - be careful about repetitive phrasings. There was a repetition of "He twines her wavy hair through his fingers" twice in the same section and it jarred a little bit for me. I hope you don't mind me mentioning this. :-/

Wow, that was different. Interesting and fun to read. Thanks for posting.

Hey!

You updated. YAY. First of all, I think as usual your writing and the ideas that you present are not only original but also exceptionally in character. I have seen a pattern with your stories now and can tell you for sure that if a writer with less understanding of the characters attempted to do this, they would fail miserably! I love yours though.

My one and only gripe about this is that Lisbon would probably, regardless of how inebriated or desperate she was, ever have sex at work. This is *strictly* my view on it, so I hope you don't get offended or take it the wrong way. It works in your story but I can't see it happening otherwise.

Other than that, it's a lovely oneshot and I particularly enjoyed the theme of her hair changing and likening her to a paper doll. Lovely!

Yana