WomAn means 1 person, WomEn means more than 1 person. You usually write: 'Shepherd looked at the women he loved walking beside him.'

When it should be: 'Shepherd looked at the woman he loved walking beside him.'

Understand? (Other than that and a few other spelling/grammar mistakes, its good)

I was a bit disapointed when this kin of thing didnt happen in mass effect 3... still... Great story!

woah CAT FIGHTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTT! lol

hahah i like what you said about the next chapter lol

can anyone say crazy woman ? lol

great chapter :D

awesome chapter it rules :D

awesome chapter

rofl i started laughing at the end lol hilarious lol

Great. I cant explain it, but the closest word i can come up with is being... pleased.

You ever had revenge on someone and felt that great sensation run through your body? Adrenaline maybe? I just felt something like it.

Words cant express, i guess. I do, however know of a word to express this follow-up chapter.

Awesomeness.

-deathunit100010

"Chapter 7"

Brutal stuff.

Would have like to have seen her knife or Chiktikka vas Paus making an entrance but this was great stuff.

ps. Poor Tali, il send her a get well card.

...wow.

Drama.

Love.

Conflict.

'Difficulties'.

Everything a Fic needs to be successful. I applaud you.

Yup. She's a stalker alright. I could tell as soon as that gleam in her eye showed up.

wtf do you mean "shes going to go batsh*t crazy"! she already has...and if that chapter was sane, then im spacing myself through the trash compactor.

This looks interesting... but I do think you need a betareader. There are grammar errors and stilted sentences.

As it is now, I can't fully enjoy the story. I'll have to admit that this is a diamond-in-the-rough.