Aside from that brief weird thing with the brackets and italics, everything else is just perfect.

I really enjoyed this fic! It's always awesome to read well written stories exploring the relationship between Fang and Vanille, And you achieved in a very organic way keeping everyone in character to boot. I hope you continue to write about these two ;)

Aww... that's such a good story that it made me want to cry.

This one is even better than the first I read: I love the desperation and Fang's *pain* that she can't make Vanille safe. The dynamic between them in this is perfect, and I could hear their voices. When I hear the characters' voices in my head, it's a good fic.

And of course, sensual. I know I've read and enjoyed your stuff before - it's good to rediscover it.

Nice fanfic!But what if Lightning got suspicious about them and then follows they start going all the way with Lightning watching not to they're suspicition!

Really great story.

Hopefully you will write more!

Thank you.

not bad, hope you write more FF XIII fics

bye

wow, that was so sweet and so very smexy. Very well described and not just the sex. But even about how Vanille liked to run simply to run. It was a small thing to add but it seems to add so very much to the story.

This was really super adorable, I really wish they had gotten some more alone time in the game so we could have seen more bonding... because I doubt Square Enix would give us the full on smexy that you did lol.

Thanks for the story!