Gosh, this was painful to read but at the same time so beautifully written it was really enjoyable. You did a great job portraying these boys emotions. Love it~

I loved it, I think you managed perfectly going for realism, I could just easily see them fighting, trying making out, finding excuses, everything that seems to happen quite often.

They are actualy so cute in teh way they're acting, we can sense the love, it's very close, but I think they were just too scared to just let it be.

Anyway, really lovely, a realistic story with those two handsome boys, I like the end, for me it really means that finally they will just accept that love they have for each other, they'll start anew, together, and that's perfect.

That was seriously beautiful okay. Like holy shit.
It was so... so /real/. I love the way you did this, too. The format of alternating past and present was absolutely PERFECT for this :3 It reveals just enough with each emotion-packed memory to truly give a feel for the angsty, distant, returning love in the present.
And geez, kudos to you for that last scene! That was just... Holy shit, so powerful~ ;u; I could practically FEEL their hands together, practically SEE the star speckled sky, practically experience the strong feelings of awkward somewhat rekindled love around. That was seriously the perfect place to end it, with that strong scene. It tells just enough without going overboard.
Absolutely beautiful~! Amazing work! :3 -heart-

TTT_TTTT that was so beautiful

This story was amazing. I really did enjoy your realistic outlook.

Also, the ending is not unhappy, I found it to be rather satisfying and a good conclusion.

Dear god, this is one of those things that just manages to put out all together in one big lump of goodness.

I loved this relationship! As original characters, their story is so good for taking it and turning it into this wonderful piece.

the pleasure is mine.

I found it absolutely lovely. The realism, the emotionality, all of it. I don't really have anything to critique, which is odd because I normally have SO MANY things to say about a story... but not this one. This one doesn't need my help.

Thank you for writing it.

LOVE IT!

i guess when you fight, it's the moment you bare your emotions wholly without having time to have a second thought...and love should be that way right; not having second thought about what you've chose and baring your soul for the other person to see? anyway, i love this piece so much. it couldn't have a better ending than this that you have written. thanks for writing. :)

Awwwww... That is soooooo cute! And painful!... Love the ending... As well as the explanation to why Gaara broke Naruto's arm haha! XD love it!

Just a heads up to let you know that your story has been copied under another name in another community. The link is below. Several of this authors works are plagiarized from the "Supernatural" fandom, so while checking for others, I found yours as well.

s/7374466/1/Adolescents

Hi,

I just wanted to let you know that someone has plagiarized your story: s/7374466/1/Adolescents

You're not alone in this. This person has also plagiarized various other people. You might want to contact stop_plagiarism on LJ.

I hate searching for fan fiction when I really want to read a gaara and naruto story.(:() I have read one too many stories and felt the authour didn't really grasp gaara personality or took naruto to the extream. After almost giving up I found this story and it made my day. I think you portraied both charaters beautifully. :•) i just wish it was more than a oneshot.

This was so beautiful 3 Very real, very believable, and just all-around amazing~! I loved it so much.