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I love this story! It's really fast-paced and interesting, and you have a great plot going for you. Very believeable. I can tell you're a fan of the books, because you're not writing from an "I've only seen two of the movies" standpoint. You know hat you're talking about. I also love the way you did Luna. It's just so characteristic, and she's one of the more developed characters in the book that really doesn't get intye limelight too often as far as fanfics go. People generally feel uncomfortable Writing about her because nobody really knows what she's thinking. You seem pretty confident though. I think you should do a fic about Luna... Maybe I'll throw you some plot ideas later.

BOTTOM LINE you're a good writer. You'll be even better with practice. Keep it up!

Finally!

I don't really read or watch Harry Potter so I don't know the background story of these people. I don't even know who the heck Neville is. All I know is Ron, Harry, and that girl with curly hair (I've been told I have an accent similar to hers).

Anyway, you have a great grammar. You're very promising as a writer. :) I wonder why people don't see that, and give you only a few reviews.

Keep it up, Annevader. :) The first story is always hard.

See you around!

-Miyen

Hm ... interesting, and do wonder where you're going with this. However, I would suggest getting a beta since some of the grammar and spelling mistakes can be a bit distracting.

Nevertheless, good job!

~Serp

'severus shape's towel!' haha that's funny. (although how does Neville know what snapes towel tastes like? You can mention something about that later). Awesome work annevader. Publish the second chapter please!