Interesting chapter and plot and idea

Lo estás escribiendo jenial sí lees ésto esperó que puedas pasar la historia a Wattpad o dársela a alguien para que la termine se que depronto ya terminaste el libro o historia pero aún así es muy bueno y no Naruto no está tan op por lo menos aún no

FYI its CHAKRA

would have been nice to see the rematch and Naruto wedding Annabel and meeting the kids that would follow.

A GREAT STORY. THE ENDING COULD OF BEEN BETTER.

I assumed Naruto would get together with either Yugito or Hinata, instead you paired him with an OC, cunning plan no denying that, but what about the stuff in Konoha? The loose ends as it were?

I thought Arceus said that the real Kyubi was on an Island that was always moving, the only island that matches that description is Turtle Island, and it's not even a real Island just a really big turtle that has trees growing out of it and really smart animals living on it.

The only thing I disliked about Hinata was that she was unable to work up the courage to tell Naruto her feelings until he was captured by Pein. It seemed to me like everyone who knew about her feelings for Naruto ignored it. Personally I think Sakura had a sick satisfaction knowing that Naruto pined for her, and eventually began to look forward to his attention to the point that if he ever stopped she'd ultimately be lost in a sense.

You might be right about this Naruto being too powerful, but I happen to like that in a story personally. Heck it's the reason I'm doing a Naruto DBZ on my computer. In it Fasha was saved by an unknown person, left with a scroll holding a lot of information(mostly jutsu and scrolls for teaching seals). Originally I was thinking of using 4 training seals that could reach up to 150 kilos(330 pounds) on each limb. But then you reminded me of Chakra Weights in your Oppet story with each individual bar weighing 25 kilos that still gives me my quota of weight. Add on to the scroll for the Gravity Trap that Naruto Modifies so that it can be applied to the body up to five times and then when he's able to really modify it making it 4 times more effective(originally the trap seal increases the gravity of an area by 10 times, modified it can be applied onto a person/saiyan so that they can train in 50 times gravity, further modified making the seals 4 times more effective makes the seals go clear up to 200 times gravity). The unknown benefactor provides Naruto with knowledge that there is a chamber hidden inside of Uzushio, a chamber that only those with Uzumaki blood(or someone in the presence of one with Uzumaki blood) can enter, this chamber has prototype temporal dilation seals through out it. These seals are similar to the HBTC on earth, but not as effective. 1 month outside is one year inside, but because you age the same time as that of out side it is recommended that people take breaks. Naruto finds the chamber with a little over three weeks left till the finals and uses the time to not only train his body increasing the gravity from the five times he had to eventually 20 times by the time he's done, as well as perfect the water nature transformation that he "copied" from Zabuza, as well as learn the Rasengan.

You know I feel like I either read this story before, or started to and stopped. Maybe I favorited it and removed it some time ago and don't remember, no matter, I'll continue reading this tomorrow(and save FFdrake's IATB The Rise for Monday probably{those chapters are freaking long}).

Ch 8

Tsunade was defeated from Abra like Machoke was defeated from abra . Really humiliating.

Nice work.

You just ruined the story. Congratulations.

Ch 5

FORBIDDEN CURSED DEMONIC SUMMON MIXED IN UNINDENTIFIED CURSE
CLOSEST BASIC RELATIVE OF NINETAILS , BASE VULPIX ,ALONG With BASIC ZORUAK BASE ZORUA , AS The CLOSEST LINE AND RELATIVES.

DELFOX LINE AND ANY FOX LINE. And MAYBE Some CANINE LINES . As DISTANT RELATIVES.

Great story. I wish this wasn't the end and I had found this story sooner.