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i loved this story and that last paragraph made my day..haha

Aww it's cute to see Peter worry for his siblings :)

Love the sibling bond! :)Great job!

After having wet seaweed flung at him (too bad it didn't hit him in the face, on second thought, forget I said that, though there are times when King Peter really deserves something like that since he is so over-protective, but I think I better get off this topic because this digression is geting out of hand), I wonder what the High King is going to do to get revenge. A sequel maybe?

That was great. Sweet and short and lovely!

Lg Luna

That may not be long but it is what you call Good fanfiction.

She's right. Oreius won't ever be able to drum that out of him. Peter's gonna have grey hair before his time.

Cute story. A little confusing at times, in terms of what's going on, what they're referring to, but altogether fairly well-written. :)

A few typos I noted, though: You have Peter with something on his "conscious". That's an adjective that means "awake or aware", whereas I think you meant to say "conscience", which is the area of our minds dealing with what's right and wrong and guilt and all that. (Sorry, that's one of my pet peeves when reading, is when writers confuse those two words.) Also, you have one of them say "being the eldest his hard", and I think you meant to say "is hard". That pesky little H got in the way. :)

Keep writing-I like your style. :)

Very good dude! xx

hehe, great story! You typed his instead of is near the end but beautifully thought out.

Incredibly sweet sibling bonding! Simply loved it, wonderful work and very true to the characters:D

This was a sweet conversation between the two elder siblings. I have a younger sister and brother so I know what Peter goes through, being the eldest. Sometimes it is hard, always watching your younger siblings, not wanting them to get hurt, trying to keep them safe from harm. It is hard to be the one they look up to, but like Susan said, it does have its benefits. I don't think I would have it any other way. Edmund splattering seaweed in Peter's hair was a nice funny touch to end the story. I hope to see more sibling bonding moments from you in the future! Great job! )

Aww, that was so sweet! I love the take on Susan comforting Peter, the two eldest siblings watching the younger. XD Oh Edmund, up to his little michief again, seaweed landing right on his head XD gotta love this family

~N.Q

Oh,thank goodness. A piece that doesn't have one of the siblings in love with an atrocious mary-sue! Thankyou for writing this, a very nice, very well written (if a little brief!) piece of writing. Its lovely to see this take on the eldest of siblings, and completely true to character. Bravo!