Reviews for Focused on You |
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freyja0taku chapter 1 . 4/29/2017 So cute! It's really great! |
XxThe Acid RomancexX chapter 1 . 8/27/2010 That was very cute! I like this story a lot because you always wish something like this would happen, but of course it doesn't lol XD Great story! :P |
Dreamstation369 chapter 1 . 6/25/2010 Aw, so cute. :3 And I have to admit, it is fun to take pictures of random people and their actions. |
Handwritten chapter 1 . 6/21/2010 Ahh :) what a lovely oneshot. You changed the norm of having Namine draw him - and gave her a camera instead! - Roxas was so sweet. and the end, when they take a picture together, was the perfect finishing touch. Great job - hope to read more from you. ~Handwritten |
idiotique chapter 1 . 5/7/2010 this was a very cute story ) i liked how roxas planned an entire day for her, even when he didn't really know her! and the way you described namine's thoughts and feelings towards photography was amazing - not too descriptive but not very descriptive either, so it was just right ) great oneshot! can't wait to see what else you have in store ) |
emmausgirl94 chapter 1 . 5/6/2010 Aw! I 3 it! |
Redeeming Endeavor chapter 1 . 5/6/2010 Hi. Thanks for such a pleasant read. I was relieved to see a fic that didn't revolve around keyblades or the like. I liked the idea too. This fic is actually written better than a lot of other stories on this site. In fact, your writing has a lot of potential. What it lacks in complexity it at least makes up for in clarity. If you could somehow use different sentence structures, or at least mix it up a little bit, it could read even smoother. I'm not saying your writing isn't good (because it actually is); I'm just giving my opinion that you definitely have the potential to write some really good stuff. The ending was nice. Very creative of Roxas, but it reminds me of a music video I've seen :-) The dialogue at the end was realistic enough. The only thing that seemed out of place was Roxas lifting her chin after she looked down. Maybe it's just me, but that's a very intimate action for people who are meeting for the first time. Overall, it was a great read. Thanks for giving me something pleasant to read. Take care, and I'll see you around. |
Hoshi chapter 1 . 5/6/2010 Refreshing story. Done very well. |