Cut down on the explanations. You don’t need to refer to the characters body being what we are focusing on every 3rd word.
You can say body broken without saying, I looked at my body and it felt broken. By doing so you cut out meaningless words, make your story flow better and thus get the audience more interested.

- Good work so far! Starting to Write a story is the hardest part

The story is one of the best written stores i have read and it is in need of a sequel now pls. You left it on a some what of a cliffhanger. What happened to the other after the battle, will the two get back to the dragon realms and the love stores for the both of them so this needs a sequel.

Good job, mate. Keep up the good work Z.

A sequel to this would probably be highly enjoyable. I really like the way it all came around, the only question now is how much time has past.
(also this is where i MEANT to post this coment)

Who goes to bed at 9:30 in summer break?
besides from that little bit of weirdness, it was good.

At first my opinion of this story was mixed but after finishing this i have 2 things to say. 1 i need to finish my lava sauna. 2 This story deserves a sequel!

"I have not... come this far... to die now." You took that from Nick on L4D2!:P

Why are dragons wearing clothes? I don't recall dragons wearing clothes in ANY Spyro games!

I love this story great writing also SLY COPPER IS THE BOMB

Great story! I can see why other readers want a sequel.

Well written!

Yay 301st review!

An amazing story overall, I must say. You have a pretty good storyline, you explain your ideas in the story without boring people to death, you introduce characters in fun and interesting ways, and you seem to know just how to make me want to strangle you for the cliffhanger at the end.

I must say that while I usually read the stories that use a lot of description and detail, I like how you do your stories, especially how you leave it up to the reader to make up the background. I eagerly await a sequel to this... if you plan on making one, that is.

'Till next time,

SWI

Okay, I'm not exactly sure why my last review only posted as "..." but here is what it was supposed to say:

...Awkward...

So Kazren's old consort is going to help him save his new one?

Again... AWKWARD!

Anywho... GREAT WORK as always.

Til later,

-Feanor the Dragon

...

Aaaaaaand, I'm back.

Great chapter, as usual.

All I really have to say is that I like the concavity/convexity breath thing.

Did you come up with that?

Anywho...

Til Later!

-Feanor the Dragon