Oh man this story is incredible! The characters are well made, and i could see the foghts happening! And oh no! Kimmy! Shinobu! What happens now?!

It hasn't even been five minutes since I finished the prelude and holy shit I can already tell this is going to be GREAT!

Great stuff. Looking forward to the continuation (and the question of what happened to Kimmy and Shinobu, easily my two favorite characters in this franchise!).

You did an excellent job on this fight. I was a little confused on Kira until I saw the authors note. I'm glad to see you're writing again!

So far:
PROLOGUE - Very No More Heroes-y. Well done.

SID - Generic. I had trouble even imagining the man,given the generic style of write sweet fight scenes,tough. Getting the Blood Berry stolen was a nice,if small,twist.

MORNING ANGEL - 's basically a holy Margaret lose some points in that the concept of the STAGE before her was terrifying and damn good.

AGENT GREY - Now,this fellow can take on .He had a amazing set-up (imagine a stage in the game chasing him,while dealing with the traps and corpses),a good concept,actually exciting weapons,and a freaking sweet dialogue - with the exception of the expository lines in the start,didn't sound natural. But "United we stand"? Both shouting "For us!" in the mid boss banter? I CAN SEE THE FUCKING BOSS FIGHT.

MASTER SCOTT and LUCILLE - Give me a good character design for both,and a good voice actor for Lucille,and this is another ranked fight that easily can be on the game. Good weapon set,if not overpowered (a maid with a sword,gauntlets,poison bombs,psychosis and all of which on fire?). Also,her progressive fall from sanity would be awesome if correctly the thing about shoving the weapons on his you imagine Scott as Christoph Waltz,that's a whole new level of fun.

BATTLE ROYALE - Even if you're copying NMH2,at least it has a twist. I suppose. We'll see.

Dude!
You haven't updated this in so long, man!
Leaving us on a cliffhanger like that's really brutal, you know.
This is about the best NMH fic ever made.

So far, this story is awesome! It's great to see all of the interesting characters of No More Heroes in the well-written fanfiction. I've enjoyed it immensely, and I hope the next part comes out very soon!

Now THAT was amazing. The battle between Travis and Sid was very well built and the broadsword twist was cool. I definitely want to see more action and stuff in this one. This is going into my favourites in just a second.

Also, I've made a small No More Heroes drabble. It's called My Friend. You may want to check it out and leave off a review if given the chance.

Anyway, be seeing you :).

Just get's more interesting.

Onto the next chap.

Hm, this is actually a pretty good start. I see a lot of potential to it.

I'm on to the next chap.

looks good, hope you continue

Great story keep updating and also for the next chapter don't make it to where kimmy or shinobu have to go up against each other or go up against travis please:-)

I open my mail, thinking there be nothing new or important, and I see you've updated. Now after reading this, I'm so darn happy to see Travis again, and the appearance of Kimmy and Shinobu is a plus too! Almost makes me want to play the game again. Thanks for updating!

Awesome! Fantastic update! Loving the story and the dialogue is prefect! I'm gonna guess Nightmare King uses a Golf Club as a weapon, nothing like crazy sports related assassins!

Kimmy AND Shinobu. OK someones just deliberately trolling Travis at this point :(

He's a very interesting character. Travis is rude, disgusting and immature at times. However he's skilled, remarkably intelligent *as seen in combat* and has his own sense of right and wrong.

Travis is very enigmatic to me, his inner workings are so interesting. Thank you again for posting this! It's story's like this that make me hungry for more No More Heroes!

Excellent job. Seriously I'm embarrassed to think of myself as a writer after reading this. This is some very good stuff, I'm hoping to learn from his so keep posting!