Kill the moron, no greate lost fir humanity. Same as you, you area waste of meat and bones with you homo stupidity.

Again, another moron who think everyone is homosexual. Remus and Sirius been homosexual is just your female side as you are a moronic homo who want to be female. In small words, dye moron.

Wonderful story. I love that they did Priori Incantatum with the wands and the dead re-ensouled. I wondered if they managed to do it with any other of the Death Eaters’ wands. It would also have helped regain more of their devastated population base. Oh well. It was just a wonder.

Still loved it. Loved the ending. :). Loved the much expanded family.

Still wondering if any others were tested to see if they were under spells because if he did it to his trusted teachers, who else did he do it to? I was surprised that he held out for 8 years, but it was fitting that he did the time that he cost Sirius. :)

As ai read this, I always think of what Dumbledore might have compelled others to do or think. Even the death eaters. After all, Why was Tom Riddle chosen by a Phoenix for his wand core? What did Dumbledore do to him that might have compelled him to become negative? And so many Purebloods were Family first? What did he set up so that he could appear to be heroic and noble?
Will they test everyone to see what was done to them before taking them out?

And that is what I call a beautiful story ending... Had me in smiling tears.. Thank you for a fun filled beautiful do-over story.
Xxxxx

I'm really sorry about this. I know that the present tense is a style. I actually like first person in many cases. But unless it's used sparingly (in small scenes meant to be intense), I am struck with a large amount of cognitive dissonance that unfortunately gives me a massive headache.

The story itself is probably great, and I'm sorry that I can't read enough to actually determine that, but I still figured that you should know.

I'm not saying the way you wrote this was wrong, but I would like to explain why I can't handle it.

First person is a great perspective for personal stories, where you are close to the main character. Nothing wrong so far. It's analogous to someone telling you a story that they experienced, one of the first forms of storytelling. It's also great for an "unreliable narrator" - you know what the character knows, and not much else.

Third person (limited) is a great perspective when you need to change viewpoints easily without much difficulty. It also excels at stories where the readers need a broader perspective than the main character. It's weaknesses lie in a slightly more difficult emotional connection.

The present tense as a writing style intensifies everything that first person is - it solidifies the unreliable narrator, it gives a direct line to a character's thoughts, and all sorts of good things. But it also creates a sense of immediacy. Things happen in "real time."

In most writing, pacing is always a good idea. It should take a proportionate amount of time to read a line of action as it takes for that action to happen. Otherwise it seems overly wordy or way too short and simple. But first person present tense makes it pretty much mandatory.

Not only that, but any timeskips seem TOTALLY out of place. Very jarring.

Finally, there are a lot of grounding details that are required that would not be in "normal" past tense writing. You need to describe what the character is seeing, feeling, and doing in the moment in order for it to really feel real.

It is an EXTREMELY difficult style of writing to pull off. Even in action scenes, I stay away from it because I'm just not that good at it.

Unfortunately, it seems like your story would be a good one in the past tense, but that just doesn't quite transfer correctly, and I get a headache trying to read it.

Seriously, I'm not trying to berate you. And I highly doubt that you'd change an entire story you made in 2010 just because someone can't read it properly. (I wouldn't.) But just in case you would appreciate a different perspective that wasn't just bitching about the tense without any particular reasoning, I decided to say something.

A wonderful fanfic
Thanks a lot

This was really good!

OK I LOVED THIS STORY AND THE ENDING YOU MADE ME LAUGH THANK YOU FOR WRIGHTING THIS STORY!

uh-oh harry run!

Great story,hope to see more from you soon.

I have now read 2 chapters and remembering your Authors Note at the beginning of this story I now have to address this. It's an amazingly adventurous story and I'm only in 2 chapters yet! I normally find first person distracting although there are exceptions the biggest being the Twilight saga, and this is another story on fanfiction that would not be nearly the story it is if it wasn't first person. That it is told by Remus who is mostly sidelined after Prisoner of Azkaban in the series only makes it that bit more poignant.

I always found him to be a character who was at the very least culpable in Harry's treatment growing up because he never lifted a finger to spend time with his best friends orphaned child. I would be ashamed of any friend of mine who abandoned my children in the same situation. This story redeems him of that at least in this story in a way that is forgivable and you want to follow him as he tells this story.

To other readers who read reviews to see if a story is worth the time, this one is beyond anything I've read in fanfic world, except maybe Harry Crow which no offense to this author is in my opinion a much better story than even JKR's original canon. But without her canon there wouldn't be Harry Crow so alls well that ends well. Read this story because it is amazing.

To the author I just say thank you for sharing.

A truly remarkable story!Thanks for sharing it!

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Ok... great story so far till I hit chapter 6... Getting Dark at 4pm? What? Not in my country! 1st Sep... Sunrise just after 6am and sunset just after 8pm... so around 14 hours of daylight if you include twilight... and that's in Inverness... at the end of the Great Glen. In Edinburgh, Scotland Sep 1st... sunsets around 15:45... and it's still daylight for about another 20 to 30 minutes...