Love the story :) but the homophobic comment should’ve been kept to yourself. Ruined the whole vibe for the chapter :\

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Loved the concept and liked the story but idk the homophobic note made me regret taking interest I understand the difference between fetishized works and just pairing because you feel chemistry would work but idk sis might wanna check that

I like your story but the homophobic notes kinda ruin it

It was such a beatiful story! I like it very much! I thought there will be a part 3... So? Hope there will be, i'll come back to read! Please!

I personally really like the story I feel like the ending was a little rushed but other than that I quite enjoyed the whole story also if you want an insult for Voldemort use Baldy Mc no nose.

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Sorry if this sounds a little rude, I swear I'm not trying to be but some people enjoy yaoi just because of the sheer diversity from real life! It's amazing to think that there's a place, even if that place is imaginary where people who swing whatever way they do can be themselves without the prejudice of the public. Sorry, I'm done ranting now.

You know I really like this story but as soon as I read a AN I'm finding myself just reading guyXguy or girlXgirl is gross and sure I'm not going to bash on your beliefs but others that read this will so maybe you shouldn't advertise that fact so much. Also I myself am a female with a girlfriend so it truly saddens me to see what you wrote(no offence though that's your belief and it would be a bit hypocritical of me to say that your beliefs are wrong in an attempt to get you to stop saying my beliefs are wrong-so no offence intended)

I have thoroughly enjoyed your story; though I wished Al and Ed made peace. Or well we can't always get what we want.

This is great, despite the fact that I'm still crying! You're depressing me... :P

One chapter in, and you've already made me cry...

So far your story seems interesting, it has a great plot so props for originality! But you have a few spelling mistakes for words like Führer, and your sentences are choppy. You're trying to make then gramarically correct and presenting a sequence of events like you would in an essay. But here it just breaks the flow of the story. Let yourself loose a little, write when you're inspired and try not to go back on it too much.

Furthermore, I don't quite understand what you mean by "I don't believe in guyxguy or girlxgirl pairings"? Whether it be in regards to some intolerant opinions of yours or not I do think this is not the place to have written that. You could have just said there wouldn't be the pairing of Roy and Ed in your story as you had other ideas in mind.

Did Ed ever find al?

Brilliant story! Did Snape survive in this one?