I was in the mood for something dark when I saw this. This story's...okay, bit cliche but "short".
One thing that bothered me was that Bella appeared too trusting of Edward and ignorant of horror tropes, though that can be explained as his vampiric charms being put to work. I loved that Bella wasn't too special, that Edward could read her mind. One of the first horror fic I've read in this fandom.

OMG! There is no hope for salvation! Bella was going to die!

Hi can anyone explain me te end please!

Thank you for making this story because it is brilliant !
In honesty, Edward kind of disturbed me when I read the books because the way he acted with Bella but with this story you've given me a reason for why he disturbs me.

I have little fish big fish swimming in the water, come back here and give me my daughter, stuck in my head now ;) My attention is captured and that is hard to do lately!

Loved it. Wish you could write a sequel. Thanks for sharing.

OMG, now this is what I'm talking about! How vampires ought to be! You didn't even need to change a thing about Edward for this to work. I'm off to read the sequel right now. Oh, I'll never blame someone for putting spite-fic in a writer's head. :)

Fabulous story! I just hope you still plan to follow through with the sequel. I can't wait to see who will win this game of cat and mouse. You're extremely talented and I hope you feel better :)

This was a FANTASTIC story. It's something like a movie I once saw, called Surviving the Game. If you haven't seen it, you should sometime. No vampires, but it's still really good. :-) Thank you for sharing your talent.

I hope one day you will be inspired to write a sequel to this. For now I'll just imagine he sends Emmett to coax her back into his game.

That was grosser than I ever expected! Kudos to you!

Well, this was disturbing and awesome all at the same time. I'm not usually a horror fan, and I love a good HEA, but this was an interesting change. I wouldn't say nice, since nothing about this story is nice, but it IS interesting.

Strangest story ever but in god way. You left us hanging at the end of chapter, I want to know what happens next! Please continue.

Young (well sort of ) wealth,eternal youth years of experiencing the world and it's history and nature but he still becomes bored such a waste a beautiful speciman but a dangerous predator please bring out the sequal I really want to know what happens next

This is one of the most intriguing yet terrifying stories I have ever read Bravo