This was a really good story.

I like the interactions of the characters and character development. The only thing that I didn't completely agree on how you wrote off her mental breakdown and how she dealt with it.

Sucks that you planned on ending the story and then a decade happened. I guess this fanfic is abandoned. So sad, but this is the ending for most fanfics. The void.

But we all know deep down that the only ending that we all have is death.

Update this story please.

Really enjoy this story. I hope you come back to wrap it up sometime!

I really loved this story, it's sad to see you never finished it, though I understand that it's hard to write something you have interest in anymore.

Update this great story please.

this story. Cant wait

Well shit I'm disappointed I didn't get to see how this played out. It was going really well there.

Okay, Azula is acting like something of a *itch here, I'm not feeling quite as sympathetic as I was with the first chapter. :-)

"Granted, I have never expected to be the loser, but here we are". Makes me think that, if she had so little invested in the actual goals of the Fire Nation - if she was only following the orders of the Fire Lord, without further thought or participation - it should be relatively easy for her to 'switch' into service to the new king, etc.

However -

"Everything I did was for our country and the Fire Lord". That's not really right, is it? I wish it was; then what I wrote above would pertain and there'd be hope she could turn around and become a good citizen again. But my recollection is that Azula was in it largely for self interest and ego. SHE WANTED TO BE FIRE LORD. Right?

I think you might have white-washed that (huge!) part of her characterisation in this story.

Still a nice read though.

I was here re-reading your superb H/Hr stories - stories I will always remember - when I noticed this Avatar one in your list. Back in the day I didn't know what Avatar was, so it never registered when the notifications for this story passed my way. (I probably thought "nuts, he's gone off Harry Potter" instead. :-))

But since then I have watched AtlAB and quite enjoyed it. While I wouldn't mind reading a nice romantic A/K story what you're doing here with Azula promises to be very interesting. Certainly this first chapter has me hooked - everything reads as perfectly acceptable/reasonable and Zuko's memories of his sister's good side (very much minor/hidden though it may be!) and his own failings has me quite hopeful and willing to invest the time in reading of his own investment in redeeming her. Great start!

I hope you are doing well, and thank you again for being part of my Harry Potter experience all those years ago! :-)

I've seen this very heartwarming piece of artwork with both Zuko and Azula performing the Dancing Dragon kata for Ran and Shao, so I was wondering if we might maybe have a scene like that in the future?

This was a great story. An honest and in depth look at Azula as she tries to recover from her breakdown. I think ultimately she has more lingering issues than you have portrayed, such as her hallucinations. Also I agree isn't a kill happy monster. When she resorts to deadly force its usually appropriate, in her opinion anyway, to the circumstances. But there still is an element of malice to Azula's personality. You heavily on "nurture" as opposed to "nature" being the reason for Azula's behavior. I think its still both. Yes Azula was striking at Ang as an enemy soldier, but I also think she took pleasure from it. I'm not saying that she is not capable of exploring the path you've set her on, but there is more to her malice than just mommy and daddy issues. I hope one day that you continue this story and explore this further.

Hi

This is another good chapter, though a few areas need work.

The beginning with Ty Lee and Azula was fantastic. I like their characterization. Ty Lee is more confident (due to her training with the Kyoshi Warriors), and wants to reconcile with Azula.

Azula is still embittered by their last encounter, but has better control of her emotions this time.

Their interaction and dialog is great, namely how Ty Lee tells Azula that it wasn't fair to try and kill Mia and to force her to pick sides. And that was a great line where she tells Azula if the roles were switched, she would have stop Mia.

Its dynamic how Azula's pride flares, but ultimately swallows it and reconciles in roundabout way. Ty Lee giving Azula a hug was great. Azula's thoughts of the situation were great too.

The next is great where Azula has been self reflecting about herself, spiritual things, Water Tribe kata, and the mystery surrounding her lost bending.

Zuko paying a visit was great too. You really captured their characters as Zuko attempts to understand Azula while she resists him at first, but eventually reveals why she dislikes him so much.

It was dynamic when Zuko apologized for tricking her, now aware that he can't build trust by trickery. And Azula is whelmed by it.

Now things seemed to be mellowing down. There is a lot of ill feelings and mistrust between them, but even Azula is going to give Zuko's plan a chance

The wholesome standards are high, except for a word or so.

I hope you like this review. I also hope to hear from you. God bless

Data Seeker

Hi

This is a good chapter. Some of the story structure needs work.

The beginning where we go back to Azula being unable to bend was dynamic, though it needs work.

Its dynamic how they both are surprised and Azula thinks Zuko did something to her though he denied it. Their discussion was well written and flowed well. But now Azula is more powerless than ever, but more resistant towards rehab and Zuko is at a loss.

The part with Zuko speaking to Mia and Iroh who are visiting was excellent. You did them well. Zuko doesn't know what to do about his sister, and Iroph recommends Zuko for not giving up and Mia points out that Azula isn't all bad, but their heavy history makes her innately mistrusting of her brother, not to mention losing everything.

Now the next plan is to try to play things on her terms and maybe losing her bending will make her more receptive. And she may regain it.

The scene with Toph visiting Azula was great. Its dynamic how while Toph is sympathetic to Azula's case, she tells her in bluntly that she is an idiot. zuko is cares about his sister and Azula should see it.

The ending was good. Azula is self-reflecting her situation. She hates her brother and her situation, but deep down knows that Toph is right. Her brother isn't the villain she wants to imagine him being and acting like a child won't gain her anything.
She has to accept her situation, Zuko and his friends, and maybe she can regain her bending.

Nice plot twist with Ty Lee showing up.

The wholesome standards are good except for some a few words. God bless

Data Seeker

Hi

Another good chapter.

The first half with Azula planning and preparing to escape was full of complexity, scope and detail.

Her thoughts and emotions are very in character as she discerns her imprisonment and obstacles to her freedom.
Also, the variables are great too. Even if she gets free, she really has nowhere to go. But she intends to escape anyway because she can't stand being in her brother's custody.

Her consideration of Water bending and Air bending are excellent, namely how she always held these arts in contempt, but concedes that she can learn something from them, namely by incorporating the water bending maneuvers into her own skills, she can overcome her restraints and escape- even though she doesn't really have anywhere to go. Still, conceding the value of knowledge was smart.

The middle and the ending are excellent, namely how Azula has a complicated escape plan and the details surrounding it. I don't know how to compliment the aspects probably, but I hope this will do.

The plot twist where Azula's plan was doomed to fail was great too. Granted the odds weren't in her favor, but Zuko preparation to make her plan go up in smoke was great.

I like their characterization, namely that Zuko willing to be easy on her, and Azula just loses her cool and to her horror discovers she can't firebend even without the metal bands. What happened exactly?

The wholesome standards are mostly high, except for some words.

That one scene where Azula is without her clothes was written in a way that isn't explicit. THANK YOU. Wish other authors did that with their stories.

I hope this review brightens your day. God bless

Data Seeker

Chapter 8

Hi

Another good chapter, though I think some of the structure needs work.

I can't tell if the beginning is a Flashback or Azula thinking about the past. Either way, her thoughts, emotions and such are excellent.

The next part with Azula in her room was great. Her thoughts and emotions surrounding recent events was great, namely how she considers her meltdown with Mai stupid, and that she lost her tact.

The next part with Zuko confronting Azula about her tirade was great. Zuko is trying to be supportive, but Azula's bratty behavior is inexcusable.

I found the characterization great too. Azula may be largely unchanged, but she isn't the same either. She is more temperamental, and knows it. Going insane and recovering has changed her a lot and she is aware of it.

Now she is plotting to escape Zuko's custody. Things are looking incorrigible for Azula rehab.

This is what I think of the wholesome standards. One or two swear words are passable due to the context. A few other words, not so much.

I hope this review brightens your day. God bless

Data Seeker