Great story

Okay, I didn't really end up liking this. The problems I noticed at the beginning of the fic stayed with it until the end.

This fic really was all over the place. The plot kept jumping from one thing to the next, and not in a good way.

The tone of the fic was also somewhat inconsistent. The beginning of the fic was kind of crack-ish, but by the end it was heavy drama with Naruto (and his past lives) getting raped and sexually tortured by Orochimaru. (I really didn't like the violence and sexual violence in the story. It got too hardcore for me.)

Even until the end, I never felt like there was a point to Naruto's friends. They were retconned into being Sasuke's fiends, but that felt contrived to me.

I still felt that Naruto was dumb at the end of the story. All he cared about was Sasuke. I don't know if he had a thought in his head beside Sasuke.

Overall, I didn't care very much for the main pairing because they didn't have much of a love story. They fell in love almost instantly, all thanks to having been in love in the past. All they wanted from each other was sex, unfortunately.

As I said, the fic had a lot of potential, but it needed a more focused plot, more character development, and some streamlining of the extraneous details.

Hm...

This fic has promise, but it's kind of all over the place. There was a massive character explosion here in the second chapter with a bunch of Naruto's friends showing up out of the blue. I don't see the purpose of introducing any of these characters. They honestly bring nothing to the story. They have no connection to the demon plot line and are just taking up space.

Next there's the cats. I think Naruto having guardian cats is a cute idea, but there's a couple of problems with them. They are already fulfilling the roles of "Naruto's friends" and they actually know what's going on, unlike Naruto's college buddies, so their presence is a reminder that Kiba and the rest are unnecessary. Another unfortunate aspect of having the cats in the fic is that they're a lot smarter than Naruto. (In fact, Naruto just might be the dumbest character in the fic.) It's not cool for the MC to be shown up by a pack of house cats.

Which brings us to Naruto. He's as dumb as a box of rocks. Sasuke keeps showing up exactly at midnight, molesting him until 1am, and then disappearing. And Naruto doesn't act like there's anything all that strange about this. Who or what does this idiot think Sasuke is? If he thinks he's a random pervert, then why isn't he calling the police? If Naruto thinks Sasuke is a demon he's summoned, then why isn't he trying to do something about that and get rid of Sasuke? Having unleashed a demon into the world is a pretty big thing. He should try to do something about that.

Finally, Sasuke. Why is he all over Naruto? I don't get what the attraction is. He was all over Naruto from the moment he was released from the scroll. Isn't Sasuke supposed to be enslaved to Naruto? So why is he acting like he wants Naruto? If anything, Sasuke should resent Naruto for being his new master? Yet Sasuke acts like he's happy to be bound by Naruto.

My cat is a angel compared to those cats

great story! :)

I love your story, I admit to being a little sceptical at first but it was great.

AHAHHAH!

That is hilarious. Lemonade Kyuubi Special. I laughed my butt off. I'm really enjoying your story so far can't wait to read more.

I have read a couple of your fics before but not this one. I am enjoying reading it immensely. My favorite part so far is at the end of this chapter(3) "a lemonade kyuubi special." Hilarious.

Hitoko-Sama, Rye, you have no idea of how hard I rofled. That latvian was as inaccurate as fuck XD It would be cool if the demons would be from Latvia (FWI, so am I) or something, but anyway, take this note and make yourselves wiser - Google Translate sucks XD

Everyday I'm rofling,
YF-Emy

You really shouldn't use google translate when wanting to translate english and spanish.

Hahaha sai gust gont poned X3

I wanted to laff so bad but I didnt want to wake up my cat as it sleeped in a ball beside me por me and good naru cats X3

If Orochymaru if u dare evan tuch sasu o so help me i will kick his sory ass back to hell!

wait it said that mizuki was one of the ones killing the uchihas but isn't naruto's boss named mizuki to? so does that mean naruto's boss was one of the ones who kill sasuke's family?