Cloud lives, yay!

I really love how romantic and sweet your Riku is.

I was looking for Riku rape fics and found this. It's very interesting. I dunno if you're right about Riku, he seems like he could very much be the mother hen type depending on the circumstances and the person, but in typical Riku fashion he won't stop what he sees as necessary evil even if he knows its not the morally correct thing to do. Just look at how he basically tells Xion that if she doesn't go back to Sora he'll force her to and how he has remorse about Roxas' fate but still condemns him to it. Axel's also guilty of that. There were so many times he could've told Roxas the truth about Sora but chose not to.

I really wanted to see, or read rather, Roxas pushing Riku away. Sure, Riku "helped" him, but I felt like the rape was taken too lightly. Why keep in contact when Roxas can't forgive them? I wanted to see more distance...but meh. Whatever.

This chapter made me want to ship Zack and Roxas together. It's too bad Roxas doesn't feel the same.

I honestly don't know what to think about this story. It just seems all weird to me. If I were in Roxas's shoes, I wouldn't have thanked Riku at all for "helping" or showing "kindness." I would have cursed my situation, and would use every opportunity to make them pay, like, I don't know, kick them in the balls or something. I'm still going to continue reading since I am intrigued as to what will happen mext.

But one thing that did bothered me as I was reading was the long-ass sentences. The first half has so many side-by-side that I felt like I had to take a breath even though I was reading silently in my head. I also started to forget what I was reading because the sentences were so long. I mean, sure, you would convey the same meanings by cutting them into several shorter sentences, but the periods gives me a second to take a break and continue. The sentence structure overall was very repetitive and lacked variation. The second half wasn't too bad though.

I remember reading about half of this a long time ago. I can't remember why I never finished it. (Maybe it wasn't complete? I have never been good at waiting for updates and usually just go read something else.) Anyway, for some reason, I remembered this a few days ago and started reading it again. I went right from the beginning to the end and it was just as good as I remember it.

I really adored the entire premise about Roxas being raped by Axel and then the two of them falling in love. It felt very realistic in a way I didn't expect such a thing to be, but you took your time and made it perfect. Leon's involvement was so wonderful and I loved the backstory about Kairi and Axel so that everything fit together perfectly. (I did think it came a little out of left field that Zell really raped Sora and Cloud was still alive, but I understand why you went for that.)

If I had one other thing to complain about within this perfection, it would be that... absolutely everyone seemed to be gay in this story. (Not that there's anything wrong with that, but it would have been nice to see a few straight characters to offset the rainbows.) Especially towards the end when you were balancing four separate gay pairings. It just felt like a lot and started it weigh in on my belief with the characters. As someone who sits firmly behind canon pairings, I can only buy into something different if its very well-written, like Roxas and Axel's relationship or Sora and Riku's. Those were just fabulous. (That's not really because of your writing though. It's just my personal nitpick.)

Anyway, this was a wonderful story. I'm glad it's all finished with a nice happy ending, though I do wonder what happened to Zell. Axel caved his face in and the cops showed up, but then he fell off the planet. Oh well... Kudos to you!

Hi. I would like to give my review of this fanfiction. This is not to offend anyone or anything. So let me explain honestly. *SPOILERS FOR FANFIC IF NO ONE STARTED OR FINISHED AND WANT TO*

There are things I liked about it. I truly did. I liked the construction and where it was headed too. When I first read it, I was really hook. Loved it. There were these guys who wanted revenge for their friend and went to a low level as they raped the boy to go after the brother they thought caused this. It started off well, showing signs of the victim and falling into depression.

Then some issues came up.

I have no problem with rape used in a plot if used properly or close to realistic. However, I didn't like how it went later. Yes, it was nice they caught the real rapist, but it made it seem like victim blaming on Roxas' part. Like how Roxas shouldn't stay mad at Axel or Roxas should've done certain things, and then ends up with his rapist, Axel. Everything is well and Roxas forgot what started this for him. It didn't matter what Axel did for Sora or if it was the right thing. RAPE IS STILL RAPE. What rape victim would go to their rapist, apologize, and get together? I honestly wanted to hug Roxas and get him away from the situation. It is never the victim's fault, so I was a bit offended by this, because Roxas suffered a lot and should not have to feel sorry for anyone else or make it up to anyone or say his rapist is his true love.

I'm sorry if I offended you, and I know it's just a fantasy and fanfiction. Anyone can write whatever they want and let out their fantasy. But don't expect anyone to feel offended. This did hit home for me. Never been completely raped, but have been through a bit of sexual violence because they thought I or someone I knew wronged them, and it did touch a spot. So it was upsetting to see this all happy and forgotten in the end. I'm sorry if you were offended, but I'm only giving an honest opinion and what I thought.

Not to say it was a horrible fanfiction. In the future, I would prefer you consider this before you try this again or think about how others would feel. If you still want to continue these types of things, go ahead, but there are others who would feel different.

Sincerely, a friend

So amazing! 0/0 Poor Riku, first Roxas and now Sora TTTT I feel for ya... (P.S. : Roxas and Axel are gonna need a bigger bottle of lube )

A very successful story :) However, I think there should be a more definitive climax (pun intended). There are a few parts that Could be considered the climax of the story, but it keeps the action going, right? Keep up the awesome work!

Yeah, gotta agree with Guest here. Sora is all like, "you were raped?!" And then it's just kinda dropped. Roxas gets the shaft (no pun intended) all through the story, while we get a written description of Sora calling him a one of a kind guy, but no real screen time evidence to back it up. Who cares about spoiled little Sora?

Okay, first off: this is a great story. It's well paced, well written, dramatic. I love it.

But I have to say, I HATE how sora is prioritized over roxas in this story. Hate hate hate hate hate. Roxas has suffered more, he's had to be alone and pick his damn self back up all by himself, but all anyone ever cares about is Sora. Sure, I pity sora, but he was more fortunate than roxas. He had a whole group of people to take care of him, and it was also implied that he was having sex before he got raped, so at least he knew what good sex was supposed to feel like. Roxas didn't have that, and his own brother seemed cold and uncaring about him being raped. His own brother! It's all about Sora. Even Roxas starts making excuses for why the kid is more important. Bull I say! I hate these characters just for that! Sora is a spoiled brat that is blissfully ignorant of the gang activity around him.

And yes, this might just be paralleling the games, (how sora is sort of like the sun and roxas is the moon), but i hate it in this story. Sora is too ignorant and too forgiving of te despicable things that happened in his name, cloud is despicable for caring more about his date than his own brother, Leon is generally despicable. Really the only characters I can forgive are axel and riku, and that's only because they've been tortured appropriately by their actions.

So, yeah... Love the story, the characters are complex and dynamic, just kind of despicable in the sense of goodness and justice

Darnit this is the 3rd time I cried while reading this fanfiction ;w; its so sad but so good!

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Axel, Roxas ain't that little. He was 16 when you raped him. Little boy is like pre 10 years old. He was a little brother, but he was in no way a "little boy." Underage does not immediately equate little

Poor Roxas! I can't believe they're doing this to him! He didn't hurt Sora which just makes this more twisted.

I don't see why they're doing this when even Axel doesn't want to see his eyes while it's happening.