Man that was a rollercoaster! Definitely worth staying up late to read, great work

I'm a 16 year old guy, and it annoys me that this made me cry. This has finally satisfied a void I've felt since I finished this game, thank you so much!

You have to write more fanfictions! I LOVED THIS ONE!

This is absolutely amazing! I wish this was the actual ending! Why didn't 5-cell get you to write it? The original ending was really bad and confusing but this is just perfect!

Much, much better ending.

Why didn't fifth cell do something more like this? The end sequence a the whole rest of it took me forever to figure out... I had to beat Wilfre over and over just to wath that sequence and make sense of it...

This is the kind of ending where on the last words, the red book of life that is opened at the beginning of the first game slowly closes...

Dang too awesome.

Wilfre taco!

Sorry that was random.

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I loved your ending! its so sweet to think jowee would do that! thnx! now i have something else to read...!

Nice... thank God the ending was left ambiguous. As far as I'm concerned, the ending that most people accept is non-canon

Loved it! This SHOULD have been the real ending to The Next Chapter, heck, you even have Heather as the little sister (from what understand). Great job with this!

I heart your ending. I am a huge MarixJowee fan, so I was real dissapointed with the ending of DTL2. You totally improved it!

Awesome!This is much better then the real ending!The real ending was nice though, I wish that could have been what truly happened in the game.

Excellent! Any tale that can make me tear up is great. I was kind of uneasy about the ending too, but I think you basically hit it spot on.

Great story. This has a wonderful plot. Also this is the first story that I read that has the Our Father in it.

Yeah!Your ending is way better than the people who created the story's!I also finesahed the two games and thought "WTF!this ending is really disappointiong!"

But your ending is great!Thats how I like storys to be!You think its not a very happy ending and they think its just a dream, but when they wake up they found out that it was all real!

I like your ending so much better! It was confusing and wierd. I still like your ending better, much less wierd and wel written. Good job.

Can it be...Yes! Someone fixed that hellspawn of an ending! *dances happily*

You, Leia, ARE. MY. HERO!

~Spark Thunderfox