THIS WAS BEAUTIFUL

The last sentence was fine, it does complete the one-shot. But I 3 this story! It's so sweet and it makes sense and it's well written. :)

*tear* Its so cute!

I actual am picturing this taking place inside the Fire kingdom palace, shortly before Zuko becomes Fire Lord maybe. The nice part about it is that it would work in multiple settings. I like it! :)

I liked your story and the last sentence is fine. :)

hey nothing perfect but that last sentence fitted the ending just right. anyway keep the good work

It is an interesting concept with the connection of the stormy weather outside with the past battle. It makes sense. The last phrase in the final sentence of not being afraid of the weather anymore brings the story back into a full circle, a good conclusion. The verb tense in some parts could be adjusted slightly, but other than that, this is a very good short story.

aww it's so cute this is the kind of zutara i love

i think you should continue youve got a gift

I like the last line actually, nice oneshot

Yay! Oneshots are so much fun! They're like Zutara espresso! Anyway, l.o.v.e. it! It totally makes sense~to me at least!~

I liked it... It struck me as very sweet and believable, especially if you're a fan of the show like I am, and are pretty familiar with the character as portrayed on the show.

BTW, the last sentence is fine... Anything short of that somehow wouldn't have fit.

I only wish it was long... Maybe you would consider expanding on it. But if not, that's OK as well. Thanks for sharing.