Reviews for Homecoming |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Great story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love It! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Très belle et terrible histoire. Merci |
![]() ![]() ![]() i have read this story straight through starting last night and finishing today- and really enjoyed it. thank you for sharing your work and i will go back to your author page and see what else you have done. thanks also for the story recs! |
![]() ![]() The Cullens are great! So are Charlie and Emmett. |
![]() ![]() Oh. Poor Bella. What had her life been with her evil mom? |
![]() ![]() ![]() To funny Chatlie has to have the sex tAlk. Edward's gift was good as Bella's was to Edward |
![]() ![]() ![]() Bella is right it did lead her to a family no matter how bad Charlie scrwed up. They can be happy |
![]() ![]() ![]() Charlie is full of shit his reputaion what a load of crap. Of coruse Bella dont hate him he does not beat her. Have you not put Bella through enough with Rene you have to make Tanya her aunt that is horrible. Good story dont get me wrong. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Really your doing this shit i am disapointed so Charlie is once again is going to let Bella down. |
![]() ![]() "Barnes and Nobles" is incorrect. It's Barnes and NOBLE. |
![]() ![]() "The principle and staff..." It's PRINCIPAL. (Remember, the princiPAL is your PAL.) |
![]() ![]() "wet my appetite" It's WHET (meaning "sharpened"). |
![]() ![]() This story is wonderful! Here are a couple of notes, just because you're such a talented writer with so much potential. "It was to fucking cute" is incorrect. It's TOO, which means "very" or "also." "It was too fucking cute." You wouldn't say "why didn't you live with I?" so don't say "why didn't you live with Renee and I?" Use ME. It's "why didn't you live with Renee and me?" |
![]() ![]() I love how you do the Emmett POVs - you can really FEEL his personality come through (and they are generally funny). Also, the whole thing with Jasper and his tire iron is a riot! |