This story is good. I really enjoy it, and I like the way you portray Kain as being betrayed, and the way you went about showing that. I also liked how 'if looks could kill'... and then, Rosa dies. I also /love/ how you described the way Cecil felt "like a teenager, young and naive" because for someone who's been in a similar situation (or perhaps even for someone who hasn't), it really sets the mood.

Very nice feel to it, and I'm glad I read it. Keep writing.

One of the things that I love so much about your writing is that you're not afraid to try new and different things with your narrative. I love how perfectly you have painted the feelings and emotions coloring each scene in this story. Great one! *hugs*

Aw, too bad they don't allow the 2nd person POV. I loved it D:. I'm a big Kain/Cecil fan, always happy to see more fics with that pairing - I'm quite sure there's some deep bond between them as well. (And that Kain's the seme. No doubt about that one for me! XD)

Looking forward for more!