cool story

Seems a little randomish, I can't really tell where this story is going yet.

This is a very cute story. I'm very interested to see what Karen will do to his nibs. And I'd really like to see what Jareth would do when confronted with an angry mom with a baseball bat.

I think that this is an excellent idea and a good start. I also think that with a good editor that this piece would really shine. And by a good editor, I mean someone who would do more than spell and grammar check, someone who has the chops and the backbone to be honest and has skill and practice to tell you what needs to be done. Unfortunately, I haven't found one either.

Wonderful! Something original. :)

I look forward to reading more in the future, so I hope that more will be available in said future. Keep up the good work!

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LOL! I can just see Karen taking a baseball bat to Jareth now! LOL! Poor Sarah. :)

This is really cute! Poor Sarah, I know Karen's just trying to help but she's really just making it worse at this point. I suppose Karen's even trying to just joke around and get Sarah to smile, which is so sweet of her, but now that she's admitted to it she's going to want to pump information from Sarah and that is so not going to end well.

Yes! Lovely story so far. Write more please!

I think it's an unusual opening, taking Karen's view and not painting her as the wicked witch. I could see this going somewhere, definitely.

An interesting concept, it's nice to see Karen treated as if she were not hostile or a wicked step-parent, but you've gone a step farther by making a fic that seems to focus on Karen as the main character rather than Sarah. I think I'd like to see where this will go.

This reading has been interesting and good to read. Thank you for sharing this with us readers today. Have a good and safe weekend. Keep smiling and to be happy. :-)More please!

this ihas so much potential! Did Sara bury the fantasy in hopes of running from the trama of the Labyrinth, or did she bury it all as a mesure to "grow" up. and why is she trying so hard? and what will Karen't wish be? how will it affect everything? will it involve Jareth? what if it does? what will *he* do? WHAT NEXT!

~Immortal Sailor Cosmos

I'd be interested in more chapters just to see where you're planning to go with this since it's wide open what could happen next. I like the tone so far, very melancholy.