Whoa. Just. Whoa. Update soon. I can't even. Wow that was good. Can't wait for Sirius, James, Lily, and Peter. WOW.

This is beautiful and terrible at the same time. You, my friend, are damn talented.

Even better - if possible - than the first. The interjections of the wolf betwen Remus' words makes the situation even more then affecting. It's almost, almost... physical in a way - I honestly wish I could have written this. Gorgeous.

Stunning - wow. You just - wow. I literally cannot tell you how many ways this is beautiful - the writing the characterizing, everything. Wow.

wow. it was pretty morbid, but i liked the style of it. the repetitiveness really gave it a more animalistic feel. really good. :)

this looks like it's going to be an amazing series :)

do update, soon.

Remus is my least favorite of the six Marauders era characters because he just doesn't interest me like the rest of them do. But the way you wrote him ... it was incredible, and it made me really want to read more.

His thoughts during the transfigurations were perfectly wolven, if that's a word/makes sense :) I loved the repetition of blood, and the way you entertwined the wolf with the man. And then the passages about the Marauder's Map ... were gorgeous. My favorite part of the chapter.

Oh my goodness, this was just incredible. I love second person, and this story was exactly why - the stream of consciousness was so effective, and it put me into Snape's head. The paradox of Severus breaking first and last is gorgeous as well - and it was nice that you explored his home life, instead of the normal scenes with Lily or the Marauders. I can't wait to see how you write their breaking - I'll definitely keep reading!

-Crescent

this is a really good piece. i liked the angst in it. small error on the second line, the k is doubled up on break, but otherwise very good ;)