Luv it.

Absolutely wonderful :) !

I think that it should be longer and it should have more details and other than that I loved it. :)

This one-shot was perfect! Great Job! :D

Hee

:)

I agree with what the other's reviewed, u can paint the perfect pic of this couple, so effortlessly :( I'm jealous lol!

You are such an effortlessly brilliant writer! Well done! :)

Loved it! Bring on more!

I really enjoyed this! Your characterisation is spot on, and I love your writing style :)

This was SO good! One of the best I've read. Very Nice!

gros/...they are siblings

nasty

You, heh. You are undoubtedly the master of the Jalex one-shot for the month. You know how to set the scene and set the mood. We could feel Justin's relaxation. His UNIQUE relaxation since you took the time to explain how HIS relaxation is not like that of a normal person. You establish Justin's character as Justin and not Justin-OOC. Not only do you establish Justin's character, but you subtly established a relationship (in which we assume is with Alex given it's a Jalex) with:

"It wasn’t until a tell-tale weight settled intimately on to his lap that he broke out of it.

Strangely enough, he hadn’t been surprised, rather he was expecting it… or maybe just hoping for it. Either way, a silly grin spread across his face."

The fact that he expected it (and was hoping for it) tells us there's already a pretty well defined "thing" going on, and the fact that he was hoping for it means it's GOTTA be something pleasant (ie. he could be expecting Harper to come in and straddle him, but that doesn't mean he wants it or hopes for it). I loved how you tricked us, at least me, at the beginning there, too. Now I don't like being tricked, but this was a pleasant surprise. An "Oh, s**t!" moment, if you will. But the way you played out Justin's thoughts when he finally realizes it's Juliet was enjoyable to read. Usually it's pretty boring to hear Justin's monotonous "no, this is wrong" thoughts whether it be because he's with another girl (not Alex) or if he IS with Alex (illegal guilt). Just the fact that you didn't literally say "no, this is wrong!" made it a lot easier to go down. Maybe if anything, the only thing that felt monotonous was the many different ways you basically said, "Justin feels guilty."

It was a bit weird when Juliet just got up and left without questioning anything. I figured it was because it's a one-shot and you want to keep it short and she already served her purpose for the plot. But whatever. In comes Alex and the fun begins.

“I can’t do it anymore.”

I see where you were going with that ;)

You sly dog, you. Trying to trick us (even more) with the classic Jalex cliches. I was not only glad that he wasn't saying he can't do it anymore with Alex, but again for some reason, I just LIKED being tricked this time (probably because I liked what he was ACTUALLY saying he couldn't do it anymore with [bad grammar all around, I'm aware, and I'm sorry]). That line still gets me every time. I clinch up, get tense, and hold my breath, hoping it's not what I think it means (which thank GOD it wasn't what I thought he meant this time). Alex seemed more chill about it than I.

"Alex acted as though he had a choice, that he could choose Juliet, but didn’t she understand that it was never about choice?

It was never a matter of decision when it came to her - there were no options, only what was."

It's funny cause it's true. Even if this wasn't Jalex, it'd hold true. But I'm so glad it was for Jalex. Freakin Alex. I love that girl lol.

I probably wanted to say something about Alex's seemingly nonchalant behavior or something, but I just had to talk about the end before I forget. It was a very nice, lighthearted ending to round off the one-shot. Not only are things right in the world of Jalex, but the way you ended it, both with the ipod bit and with one of Justin's final thoughts. I LOVE one-shots that bring it back around to the beginning by either referencing something from the beginning of the story, or by noting a scene from the time frame the fic started at (if it was a story told chronologically). It just adds a bit of finality, and it feels like actual THOUGHT was put into the story (whether the thought was intentional or not). In case my words didn't make sense, I meant:

"There it was.

The dark curtain of hair cascading over him, the round, shapely mouth that so effortlessly tortured him, and the chocolate brown eyes that held so much more to be known. She had asked him what he wanted, and here it was. Just this moment - that was all he ever wanted. A lifetime of these moments with her."

Beautiful. F**kin' beautiful. I just adore the way you can paint the scene for Justin and Alex, and how you can make them so perfect for each other. Cause they are.