Honestly as a writer you have no idea what your doing. You think out of about 15,00 memebers in the order this oc is the only one that is a mandelorian. Mandelorian’s aren’t a species but a culture of warriors that aren’t even proper warriors anymore by the clone wars. The oc was taken as a infant so mandelorian culture wouldn’t have sit in yet. Also he wouldn’t have been allowed to leave for madelore until he acheivied the rank of master. Lastly just from your summary on the oc I can say for sure that you don’t know all to much about the force.

Please continue please!

Are you going to update its 2018?

Are you going to update its 2018?

I remember seeing this in 2009, where did the posting go?

I loved it thanks

that was amazing pleas pleas wright a pregule

Its a great story and i give it 9/10out of all the stories i have read. i would recomment this to other. but i would also love to see updates on this book

Great story and i give it 9/10 from the stories i have read. i would recomment this to other. but i would also love to see updates on this book

I love these types of stories. (To anyone who sees this review)
If you know any stories that has an OC where life support armor like Tal in this story then please share the name of the story. I think that it is badass.

I liked this story,there should be more like this :)

this is a fan fic there should be an erotic 50 shades of grey bdsm scene i was wating for youngling sexy time

great story i really hope that you continue it.

i can't wait for the next part

I like that you've switched to prose rather than script