This is really good, I love the characterization and I can't wait for whatever's next!

Oh, this is beautiful! You are truly a work of art! Better than Dickens, I tell you! No cheesy storyline, it's perfect! No errors at all! 10/10

So, is this getting a continuation or not? It's pretty great.

"It wasn't like cheering and dancing and singing for other peoples' sake was easy to do!"

I LOL'd.

(oh man gotta sign off in a minute or so but here goes, quickie review)

YES, moment of awesome. You're right, that's just the way this chapter had to end. Developing plot is nice, but the Divas' background was more interesting this time (lol at the Commander takin' politically correct heat and hiring Starr.) It's really neat how you've personalized them this time.

Anyway gotta roll! Waitin' for the next one~

Hee, Maximilian Steiner! I SEE WHAT YOU DID THAR. I loved how he kept jumping to ridiculous conclusions, and how the rain cleared up right away. That whole bit was brill.

Ah, the Divas are fabulous-I almost like them as much as the guys. Their peppy dialogue is great.

Anyway whoop, trouble on the horizon (or in the ocean?) Can't wait to see what happens next.

Ahaha, what the hell, EVERYBODY SHOPS AT WALMART, even in the middle of most remote desert DBZ-ish field on Earth.

(so he thought that perhaps he could develop laser vision and burn the paper, destroying the evidence.)

Heh! That line is so left-field it's funny.

Spin's gay jab was a nice pwn. I'm really going to enjoy BA-2 and BA-5's banter, methinks.

Aww, that father-son talk was strangely sweet. I've never heard a parent use that "just like me" line, heh.

This chapter did a really good job of bringing the cast together-even though they're all apart doing their own things. It's a great intro!

Hwar, need to sleep now... gonna read next chap tomorrow~

Heheh, a writing couple! Best marriage ever.

Agent Spin's landing made me snrk, too. Good thing that poor sap got backup! Just another day of agent...ing.

Favorite line this time:

“What makes you say that?” Morris asked, blinking sand and bags from his eyes.

(I really don't know much about this game outside the premise, but this is fun to read anyway. I like these guys so far!)

Ohoho, so THIS is that thing from '07. I am delighted, miss. Your sense of humor and whimsy is in top form here. I laughed at the Superman line and the flashback. lawl, Philip has no tact with the ladies. He's one of my favorite types of characters, the oaf with his heart in the right place.

Really though, great work on the setup. Your style works so well with this, easygoing and easy to read-it's like opening up a good comic book, with the perfect setup for adventure! I hope you post more soon.