This is fantastic!

WOAH! That fic is intense! I love the last line.

"People do come into your life like lightning, but every once in a while, there's someone who catches and spreads like a forest fire."

Its intense and I love the wording of it! )

~SOFiA...(REAL NAME)

This story is really beautiful, in Azula's sad and twisted kind of way. Keep up the fantastic writing! :)

DFTBA

~Jo

excellent. ah, Azula

"People do come into your life like lightning, but every once in a while, there's someone who catches and spreads like a forest fire." I love this similie, do you mind if I use it? I'm not sure where it'll come into play, but it's beautiful and accurate.

Thank you for writing this.

Absolutely fantastic. This is beautifully written, your portrayal of Azula is spot-on, and everything is purely amazing.

Wow. Perfect Azula. Congrats. This is amazing.

Wow. That just rendered me speechless.

Grammar/Spelling: A. There wasy this one place... ah, here it is. Capititalize 'you're' in:

"No," replies Zuko solemny, "you're not."

Creativity: A, I've never seen anything like this before.

IC vs OOC: IC the whole way. I love how you portrayed Azula. She is most crafty, and I can actually see her thinking this.

Overall Awesomeness: AWESOME! I loved it, even though I'm not a big fan of present tense. Added to my community, congratulations.

Keep writing and have a nice day.

~Summer

Excellent. Well written and you captured Azula's character exceptionally, in my opinion. Well Done!

The quintessence of a Powerful Oneshot. Loved it.

love it! You captured Azula's personality perfectly, I can't wait to read more of your stories :)

Well written and it's an interesting delight to read work which waxes so lyrically. There were a few sentences that become over-wordy or stumbled a little and interrupted the flow, but overall it's a pleasure to read and there were plenty of little gems to be found. I particularly liked: "Azula likes hearts and how easily they can be broken" and "The Agni Kai is a dance of evasion and offense, feet sidestepping, arms punching forward, painted in smoke and coloured heat." The former is a very beautiful allusion to Azula's ability to break hearts both physically (with lightning) and her ability to break hearts symbolically, with words alone. You did a fantastic job condensing these ideas into one simple and elegant sentence. The latter example is a great display of your ability to twist words and summon vivid images with them.

The introduction is strong, it begins to weaken a little in the middle (for some reason the writing felt a little jarred during Azula's defeat and the childhood memory seemed a little contrived) but you picked up again at the end; it finishes on a wonderfully strong and poetic note. The title is also an attention-grabber - kudos for thinking that one up. And it's refreshing to see a well-written and succinct summary.

I'll stop rambling. For some reason I'm in the mood for writing epic reviews. Sorry bout that.

Thanks for sharing a beautiful fic

That was very good. Satisfying to read. You have a wonderful voice and captured Azula perfectly.

This story is utterly fantastic. It's well written, the thoughts are in character, and really makes you see the world from Azula's perspective. Good job!

I like how you writed this scene from Azula's point of view. You're not the only one who did it, but you did it really well.