I absolutely loved this! It's been so long since I've laughed out loud reading a story, thank you! I sincerely hope you write more for this fandom soon

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AWESOME!

Lmao wow. that was interesting. Makes me wonder how fuji would have asked echizen out.

Haha. What a comedy of errors. I like!

Wow. Where do I even begin.

I suppose the most striking good thing for me was the way you handled the third person point of view shifts. It was done in a way that it wasn't awkward, and was actually smooth. From Ryoma, to Eiji, to Ryoma, to Inui - the volleying was done very well.

Your characterization was just right, and the way you did it made it seem as if it was effortless. Nothing was exaggerated, and nothing seemed forced.

I also liked how your story and your title wove around the other perfectly. Oh, and your pacing was very stable!

I loved this. Brilliant fic.

A good title to give for this one-shot. Ryoma's thought process, angst, and mortification over his trials was amusing. Inui's incorrect data was understandable, but to see him make an error anyway was incredibly amusing.

Poor Kaidoh. XD

Ah, and the best part of this one-shot was the end when Inui came into the locker room. Lolz, Ryoma and Fuji in such a compromising position - nice. What's better is that Fuji, being Fuji, calmly greeted Inui as if he didn't have his hand down Ryoma's pants.

I hope you write another incredible Thrill Pair story. It's rare to find a good one these days. :D

hahahaha! Nice Inui... I love this, it's hilarious :)

Ah... How refreshing. Thank you for writing this piece, and I do believe you pulled it off. :) I haven't read a good Thrill pair fic recently, so it's nice to see that there's still hope for this fandom. Your characterization is interesting. Eiji seems more seductive in the story. Ryoma's frustration was infinitely amusing and I feel terrible for Kaidoh. Poor guy.

Thank you for writing!

hehehe, this story's genius xD

love it, you have a nice writing style and it's just hilarious how everything which can possibly go wrong really does go wrong xD nice job

lol woah :)

Omg, I love this story! I love that Inui thought that it was Kaidoh. Very nice!

MY GOD. IT'S REAL GOOD. I LOVED IT 3 BEST FIC I'VE READ IN A LON LONG TIME 8D I'm laughing my ass off right now by the way 8D

Love this! ;D

The writing is smooth, plot very interesting indeed, characters very well portrayed and I LOVE how you wrote the story from different POVs. And the ending LOVE. ]

This fic is so cute! And Ryoma, aw, worrying about how to confess, although, Kaidoh was an unexpected twist. XD And Eiji and Oishi, of course, time they got together.

Awesome writing, really, so write more soon!

it has been such a long time since i came onto and i was extremely happy to read this story. (: the hard work has paid off cause its really good.

i liked the description, the way its written in a third person's point of view, cause it seems as though someone is silently watching them. the part where eiji assumed that oishi was the one who wrote the note made me brawl with laughter. kaidou was funny too. i liked the way it subtly ended.

overall, it was beautifully written. :D

Hilariously brilliant. Especially the Kaidoh bit. You're right to be proud of it.