XXXXXXXXXXXXDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD there was so much Rouge Ridiculousness! and I would have anime fallen to, while sweat dropping. and Shadow has more attacks than he shows! yes. why Eggman? Why? WHY? WHY?! that dirty stuckup sadistic shit eating cock sucking butt fucking penis smelling crotch grabbing ball licking semen drinking dog raping nazi loving child touching cow humping perverted spineless heartless mindless dickless testicle choking urine gargling jerk offing horse faced sheep fondling toilet kissing self centered feces puking dildo shoving snot spitting crap gathering big nosed monkey slapping bastard screwing bean shitting fart knocking sap busting splooge tasting bear blowing head swallowing bitch slapping handjobbing doggy caressing mucus spewing anus grabbing hole plugging non-circumsizing sewer sipping whoremongering piss swimming midget munching douche bagging hole munching atom wasting carbohydrates processing asshole!

WTF! o. o thats so strange but uh why shadow?

hm. How interesting. :3 you should continue writing! C:

i hope you update its cute and funny and i love the part where they askied the three boy what about what kagome wants it was funny love hope you update soon.

cool! can't wait for an update, i look forward to more funy chapters!

i love this story! please please PLEASE update soon! you are AWESOME!

nu!~ you dont leave a girl with curiousity the size of jupiter with an unfinished story...cause ur just beggin for me to murder you when ya do that .

xD HAHA LOL! Luv it! Its unique, interesting and amusing! *faves* hope ya update soon!

Alright, you seem to be over the whole "not starting a new paragraph when the speaker changes" now. But, that has been replaced with something new; half the time, I have no idea who's talking. This is because of things like this:

"You're not drawing anything you lecherous monk. I will draw with Shippo, Kilala will keep an eye on you." Kilala licked her paw, as if completely unconcerned. Miroku sat down, a wonderful opportunity to help Shippo grow up... quite gone now. He noticed Sango was drawing a village scene with Shippo, she was doing the buildings and scenery, Shippo was doing the people. It seemed like a bad mix of a cartoon character put against the Mona Lisa... How did Miroku know about the Mona Lisa? Kagome had shown him pictures, and once, taken them to an art museum. Of course, Sango had kept a tight grip on his arm to make sure he didn't go to any of the passing girls. What a pity, he could see at least twenty at any given time who were quite pretty.

I've done this before, and I do it again:

"You're not drawing anything you lecherous monk." Sango sat beside Shippo. "I will draw with Shippo," The demon hunter looked back at her feline friend. "Kilala, please keep an eye on Miroku." Kilala licked her paw, as if completely unconcerned.

Miroku sat down. A wonderful opportunity to help Shippo grow up... quite gone now.

He noticed Sango was drawing a village scene with Shippo, she was doing the buildings and scenery, Shippo was doing the people. It seemed like a bad mix of a cartoon character put against the Mona Lisa.

Miroku knew of the Mona Lisa due to Kagome showing him pictures, and once, she had taken them to an art museum. Of course, Sango had kept a tight grip on his arm to make sure he didn't go to any of the passing girls. What a pity, he could see at least twenty at any given time who were quite pretty.

You have great potential, you loco rodent, the problem seems to be your lack of patients. As you stated: you update right after giving birth. Bad idea. If you don't get a beta, than at least wait a day then reread what you have written, and you may find a mistake you didn't see before. Sorry it took me so long to review, I'm a very busy man.

This chapter gets a 2 out of 5.

S.T. Hedgehog

P.S. Kun is Japanese, in case you weren't joking.

Oh, man this is too funny! By the way, do you not like Twilight. If so it's good to know I have somene who agrees that Twilight isn't the best book in the world. I really really like this.-

*laughs hysterically at Knuckles' grape obbsession*

*calms down moments later* I hope this continues! xD

UPDATE SOON! ) i like it alot so far, especially with kagome/shadow!

I kno its 3 am but, THIS IS SO HILARIOUS! Knuckles and crapes thats rich!

Not enough details, too much dialog. Characters like Eggman, Shadow, and InuYasha aren't chatter boxes. Huge, balky paragraphs are major turn-offs to reader. You have the first paragraph two, and the last one three. Also, Shadow has let go of his past, and doesn't even remember everything about Maria.

"No it isn't. Ever since we beat Naraku there has been nothing to do. There is the occasional demon but there's never enough of a challenge! Never enough action!" Kagome sighed.

BIG problems here. This, and other times the characters tell what has happened, would go smother if more like this:

InuYasha glared at Kagome, a slight growl escaped from his gritted teeth.

"No it isn't!" the dog demon barked. He had been on edge lately due to Naraku's defeat a few mouth's earlier. Going from near non-stop action to nothing but down time took a toll on the hanyou. To make matters worse, Kagome had been even more controlling then ever.

Kagome heaved out a sigh, and began to explain, in a flat voice.

"Sango invited us over for dinner."

InuYasha's eyes widened as disbelief washed over him. Unable to contain his emotions, the silver-haired "hero" yelled "See? Nothing exciting happens anymore!"

... and you take it from there.

No offence, but, you should really get a beta reader.

This idea gets a 4 out of 5, but the execution gets a 2.

THIS IS AWESOME! I CANT WAIT TIL THE NEXT CHAPPIE!