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AH! :D That was so cute.

Coolio.

HAHAHA! Oh my goodness, i couldn't stop laughing during that. Absolutely wonderful!

"His paw had regained its spot on my thigh , and it had begun gently caressing my fur , soft swooping circles , working their way closer to my inner thigh , closer to my…

My eyes rolled back, filthy thoughts flooding my mind as fervent fire smouldered silently within me. His scent was so intoxicating, so distracting…NO!"

Pure genious, that's brilliant. Tugger/Misto is the absolute BEST pairing, i'm so glad i read this fanfic, it sure made me smile. )

XD Alonzo, you dirty-minded cat. I really like that for once someone is resisting Rum Tum Tugger, and he's actually having to attempt at seduction for once, rather than just giving a pelvic thrust at them XD.

I think you've characterised them pretty well, and this story is actually oddly sweet. Well done!

Just lovely ;p and make it rated M 3

Haha. Love that ending scene! it just so made the whole thing! Love it! :3

~Nekosblackrose

lol It's so cute, Fantastic job! .

Ah so cute! I loved it; very nice one-shot.

*giddy fangirl squeal* That has got to be the CUTEST thing I have ever read!

The very first thing I noticed was the punctuation issues. You're missing a lot of full stops and commas after speech. It's a small fault, but really annoying to read when repeated so frequently. A simple proof-reading through the site's editor would catch that - I'm not sure it's your fault, you see. ff. net sometimes likes to eat punctuation when you upload with certain document formats.

You also have a couple of tense issues. For example "his suggestive gazed", which should really be "gaze". again, this could easily be caught by some proof reading. If it sounds weird when you say it aloud, it's probably not right.

I also have no idea what the hell context this is in: "He grabbed his wrist and reluctantly removed it." You've either broken your first-person narration, or you need to clarify exactly why Tugger is grabbing his own wrist and removing it.

I'm also not too certain about your characterisation. Then again, that's why they call it "fan fiction" I suppose.

Just fix the errors and you've got a good story.

Ahh, thank you! . That was fantastic, really needed it lately...I miss writing these two! ;) The rating's rather iffy. Personally I found it to be a T that's maybe on the verge of an M. Not very helpful, but I guess just to be safe you may as well keep it at an M. People on the hunt for a good Tugger/Misto will find it regardless ;)