This is AMAZING! I loved reading this so much that I didn't want to finish it!
Are you going to add anything onto this story? I'm DYING to know! (ooooohh pun!)
-C

Intriguing. Nicely done.

This is a beautifully written oneshot; the darkness and emotional anguish is clear but all the same heartwrenching.

I love your style of writing: it's descriptive but doesn't overuse the adjectives. An admirable trait!

Keep writing,

Wynterarrow

Okay, so this was awesome. Yeah, awesome. First off, I love Kirk - and there was plenty of Kirk - so, thank you. Second, the dark surrealism of this piece was really appealing to me because I prefer darker literature. So, claps for you :) Third, I really like the title. At least, from my perception, it's a Coldplay song, and they are my favorite band. Perhaps it wasn't after the Coldplay song, but I still like the title. Anyhoo...ohmigosh I totally am a score nerd too! haha...okay back to your story.

I really like the beginning intro. Grabbed my attention and all that business. Once again, claps for you :)

So, that was my review. I basically loved it. And I hope this all made sense because I just wrote this Lit. Paper and my mind is like oatmeal. Oh well. I really think you should do some more dark one-shots. I will totally be reading! :)

It was very well written, very surreal, which is a nice change of pace every now and then. I liked your approach to Death, very un-cliche, that he was just doing what he does, no malice, no evil. Just Death. interesting. I did have some trouble keeping the lines with the big blocks of words, which would ordinarily deter me from continuing (just fyi for next time) but I know what it's like to put something out there when you're not sure what the response will be, so I wanted to give you that answer. this is really well done, a different side to Kirk, I'm not even sure what i'd call it. Not mature, not even dark really (seen lots of that in Kirk before) not daredevil...maybe it's just the Kirk in him, a man who lives so close to the edge he's practically over it, but never actually falls. The fight scenes were very descriptive and captivating and, oh, I think my fave part was the description of Kirk on teh bridge, helping out where needed and keeping things going. Anyway, that's my two cents.

pj

This is really great, I llove it :)) THink you could make of a two shot? :)

Awh, I'm so glad he made the right choice! I have to keep this really short, because I'm about to go babysit, but I'll probably PM you something more elaborate when I get back. I just wanted to say this was really good, and I do very much enjoy the darker, more serious style your writing took on in this story. I love the image of Jim just sitting on a bench, kicking his feet back and forth, waiting to be departed to the land of the dead. Your view on death, though different than mine, is beautiful. I'm really glad Jim chose to go back, though. It would sort of be hard to write about the land of the dead, and though there are tons of possbilities, it's nice to keep some of it shrouded in mystery. -coughs- This got longer than I expected, but it's still sorta short. Expect a PM from me.

Great job!

Love, Allie

Very good! I really enjoyed this.