Reviews for Jonas Disease |
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![]() ![]() ![]() You have a great story going please Finish |
![]() ![]() ![]() As the niece of a nurse I feel that if I don't provide you with medical terms then I would be disappointing my aunt. So with that said I had done some research on black spots and bruising and I found this website that list the possible causes of bruises and blood spots under the skin. I HOPE THAT YOU DECIDED TO WRITE ABOUT THE MALNUTRITION CAUSE OF A BLOOD SPOT FOR THAT TOPIC IS THE MOST INTERESTING TO ME. not that any other idea that you come up with won't be interesting to me, but still... Any who. Here is the website link and I hope to read more of your heartwarming and brotherly story very soon. Take care and have a nice day. healthwellness/hw/medical-topics/bruises-and-blood-spots-under-the-skin-bruse |
![]() ![]() ![]() Have Joe be on the brink of death and then have him recover. Great job! |
![]() ![]() ![]() i like your story! |
![]() ![]() do you know how many times ive read this story? and even though the Jbros are grown up (tears!) can you please finish this? it would mean the world to me. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey, I love this story! The idea of it is amazing! The writing could be improved. But overall, it's not too bad! I would love to see this updated! And if you need an un-official beta, I'd love to help out! Let me know, and I'll give you my email. Hope you get to finish this story soon! |
![]() ![]() Love the story! So gripping lol! Please update! |
![]() ![]() Oh. My. Joseph. Amazing! Im, in no joke,love with this story. Kevins so cute! And protective! And, and, big brotherly! An Joe's so sick! And Nicks so, just, adorable! UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE! 3 |
![]() ![]() Update soon! Love love love this! |
![]() ![]() Great story please UPDATE SOON! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Okay now that your other chapters have been broken up ( not in block) there way easier to read but i would suggest getting a beta reader just a suggestion! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ok great story but heres a few tips: 1. dont do block writing its hard to read HIT ENTER! 2. Read through your story after you are done because you have a few things that you repeated, or it didnt make sense. But other than that great story please update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() i love this story so far ! The fact that Kevin's so brotherly :D i love it can't wait for more xxxxx |
![]() ![]() ![]() is Kevin stupid? TELL SOMEONE! loveloveLOVE it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() this story is really good but the idea to capture the audience's is if you double space some paragraphs to make it easier to read but other than that it's so good |