daww this story is soooooooooooooo cute. please do more

Aww, I love the father-son relationship shown here! I'm actually really fond of family fics, and this is a really good one. I hope you will start to update it again, but it has been awhile, so probably not. Still, it was nice to see

I'm very happy to find a story displaying the relationship of Raz and his father. You portray the characters beautifully and the prose is very nicely written. Very good job, please keep writing more !

Raz's mother is a clairvoyant but not, like her son, a telepath. I wonder if this has any meaning, as the text tells Raz is questioning this himself.

I guess Raz getting invisible connects to his drowsy state? The question is if he lost "control" or his invisibleness mirrors his blank state of mind. Poor Aquatos. Having a son with such far-developed psychic powers is difficult, even for a psychic family.

The chapter is too short to analyze it truly, but the flow of the words is good and you capture the voices of Raz and Augustus.

Aww! This is really sweet and touching, and it's nice to see someone portraying these characters. You've got the personalities down, and the dialogue is entertaining! I hope to read more!