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![]() ![]() DAMMIT!I WILl KILl You If YUo DONOT CONETINY(ou.. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Has anyone adopted this fic? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really only have one thing to complain about in regards to the story thus far: He's had her for like two days and she's been emotionally healed enough to evolved already? A simple "I love you" was enough to trigger it? Seems extremely unlikely or the Dark Kitsune wouldn't be so damn rare. Well, OK, more than one thing. The second one is in regard to Tenshi. How could he just steal her from her previous Tamer without being arrested or at least questioned for it. Same with the five bags worth of merchandise Kryie stole. Third: Where the Hell did he get all that money from? Tamers don't get paid. |
![]() ![]() this story is good i wil hunt you down if you stop writing dis fanfic serioušly i enjoyed it |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love to read more of this story I hope you update soooooon :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Not greatly pleased about the drop but can understand that it is writers prerogative since they kind of write the fic. Hope to see it go to a good home or that the writer will decide to continue this fic. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Enjoyable chapter. Like the situation he ran into near the end and how he handled it. Good plot so far. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Quite the enjoyable read. Plot so far is interesting and makes me wonder about a lot of things. Kinda hoping Joy will join his harem before he leaves. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Please PM me if this has been adopted. |
![]() ![]() ![]() more plz |
![]() ![]() ![]() You did good with your story, I am willing to give it a go with only a few minor changes as I am a different writer, but it will have to wait till I finish my Harry Potter/Pokegirl fic I am trying to recreate. I do find it somewhat humorous that both your story and the one I am recreating both ended on their third chapter of the story. If you are curious as to my pokegirl story is I am willing to show you some of the slightly edited story for you to read or even offer suggestions would be nice. Fair warning though, they are fairly long. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I do have some questions: 1st.) Being that if Naruto wanted to get away and not kill the Wasps/Wasp Queen, then why not just have Kyrie Teleport both the Cherry and him away from there, it would have been more effective in the long run. 2nd.) Since you didn't use Teleport(and you don't like to put down both levels and SLC bounty amounts) then when Naruto knocked the Queen out why didn't Naruto end it with a combination of his wood/stone manipulation and a Kunai to the forehead of said immobilized unconscious Queen? 3rd.) Why give up the Gypsy? She would solve Naruto's major problems; Not knowing the terrain and as a path finder. He could also teach her how to set up traps and refine her stealth. I find her to be one of the most useful pokegirl for a Cross-Dimensions traveler that is normal for use in the Pokegirl world( normally found in crossovers, you make the second one to even mention the pokegirl Gypsy). Finally I wanted to say that you did a good job on the Lemon scenes and tried to make them as really as possible. |
![]() ![]() ![]() great story i hope u will continue it soon but i understand sometimes u just get sick from doing just the same stuff... ;) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ur a fuckin loser for stopping this. Have fun being a failure, fucking retarded cocksucking faggot. |
![]() ![]() ![]() my god, are you sure this was your first lemon? it was beautifully written, and I look forward to more! |