Yay, reviewing the totally awesome chapter! All I can say is I loved this chapter almost as much as I love fudge. So you know it was frickin' fantastic. Oh, and the explanations were clear and well put. Great job!

XD I research shit like that for stories all the time, but I just research stuff that is intriging, like I didn't know there was such a thing as DNA virusses until I looked it up for a story. Either way, nothing but typos to be found, so your good!

Wow u sure have researched a lot about the technology we expect to see in this story, i like futuristic stuff so keep up your great job! try and update more often dude.

The Fanfictionlover

Good chapter. Update soon, please.

-Ice

i like this story a lot its awesome

nice. i like it so far.

Very good chapter, Shadow. Very nice. Update soon.

nice chap. I see you improved on character dialouge, and I noticed that you have small comma placing problem, or just the same typo by hand placement on keyboard. It's supposed to go, for example

He said, rolling his eyes a it.

Othewise, very nice in detail. That's it.

This is an impressive piece you have written. I hope to read more.

It was good, as a beta, I suggest that this chapter should have had the detail you implanyed in the last. The chapter repeated itself, I am not sure how that happened. Weird. Also, I have to say that character dialouge dhould be more like what it would be like if someone of that character actually spoke.

“Ah Fell , it seems we meet a third time. Clueless as ever. This time you will not stop me, I have more power and better allies than you three have ever dreamed of! ”

An evil character should say something a little more macabre and if they know the character they are speaking to, perhaps they would attack a pet peave they had, or just put them down as worthless trash. I just found that piece of dialouge a little dry.

that was extremely descriptive, though a few typos here and there, but that was probably the document transfer, I notice it happen to me all the time. It was great, though I know nothing of the sight. Should prbally read it.

three words:

this

is

awesome

oh and i was having the worst day of my life and the "u know ur obsested with the sight when" cheered me up.

good job. but i didnt know that morgra had a white coat too because in Fell it was described as grey and scarred. plus what is the Jayfeather talk?