Wasn't this backstory from the chaos trilogy on DA? I think from somewhere in the Insane Smiles story.

I dont know what a flame is but this chapter was really good!

Oops I believe I meant "Lucius" in that last comment! I don't think there would be a devil king involved! *embarrassed face*

Did you take Dimentio's story from somewhere, with a couple of changes and a few less details? I'm sure I remember another version that lasted a few chapters, with names for the characters (e.g. Rosabella, Ganter, Lucifer, Allen).

dimentio's story sounds very familiar

Wow. I am completely amazed by this first chapter. I...wow. This was amazing, for this is what I imagine Dimentio's back story to be (and I don't think you wrote him out of character at all). In fact...I'm writing a story similar to this, same type of concept.

This chapter alone is extremely well written, so I can't wait to see what the other chapters are like! All in all, awesome job :).

love it!

I just love the ones like the ending.

I love this so much!

*gaps at screen* Loved it! Dimentio! I love this game. Gotta say, this was a masterpiece of Paper Mario. Aye? can't wait to read your sequel!

Sad. I had to shed a few tears. This was exceellent! I love Dimentio! He's the best bad guy you will ever meet/see! C'mon, a jester? Magic? This guy is my favorite. I love Dimentio! It's sad no one saw Dimentio as a normal person. Even if the princess didn't love him, her blinde eyes could've have just seen him as a normal person. Being called traitor hurts.

Deeply. Man, I love Dimentio...

This is really, really interesting.

However...

Dimentio was EASILY the best :D But I miss some of his funny puns.

That's odd... O_o I've seen this chapter before on deviantART yesterday. I was known as Mariofanstar on that site, I was thinking if this fic of yours should be in the C2 and the chapter should be in the Count-Bleck-fans club. This is too long but I've gotten through it all right. :) By the way, there is already a character in Super Paper Mario named Bleu, he lives in Flopside and has the ability to give Peach a new hairdo which is a ponytail. Just like Dupree from Paper Mario: The Thousand-Year Door, Bleu speaks in a French accent and has a daughter just like Sacre from Flipside.

Lol, I think Girls Aloud's “Can't Speak French” and “Je Ne Parle Pas Français” suits Count Bleck/Blumiere, don'tcha think? XD

Ooh, a lovely ending! I can't wait to see your sequel! I love how you tied all of the different stories together for the last chapter!

this is great! It's alright he's slightly OOC, a villain HAS to start somewhere, no?