This is SO EPIC! Im laughing my ass off at Ty getting soo annoyed with his soldiers and Edy! Marina got him good but knowing Ty it wont be the end of him. I know its been a long time but please please please update I want to see what happens next!

The story was good so far! It was kind of weird seeing Homer's reaction to not being next to her in the mess hall for a second though. I dont think he would really care being seen as a couple with Edy if it meant getting 'kick' outta her. Lol

There really need to be more stories on this game! I mean theres not even 500 stories out :( Anyways, I look forward to reading the rest dude!

Is this story finished? That would be really sad...

Geld got what he deserved.

You know in that game I killed Ty the immortal six times so yeah im convinced hes immortal.

Evil cliiffhanger update ASAP!

This story is just awesome I love Edy she's my fav character and shocktrooper hope you update soon.

There is only one word I can use to describe this story, and that word is Amazing. To take the characters from the game that don't really get a lot of screen time and put them front and center in a stand alone fic is rare. Even rarer is that you managed to make it so enrapturing that I could not stop reading chapter after chapter. And though it has not been updated in some time, I hope that you will come up with another installment in the near future. And in parting, R.I.P. Elysse. Hopefully your death will not be in vain.

AWESOME! I read the whole thing and I really hope you update soon!

Really great to see this story updated again - like I've said, Ramona's totally my fav, so that last cliffhanger was a killer.

Overall, I really don't have too much to say about this chapter beyond a few nitpicky points. I'll repeat the suggestion against using bold for emphasis just once more (though more eloquently this time C.C) - it draws the eye a bit too much, and pulls me out of the story. As far as the formatting goes, unless you're purposely trying to draw attention to the actual writing itself (which I don't think you're aiming for), you want to make the text as invisible as possible. If you have to use a different formatting for emphasis (In most cases I'd debate against changing anything at all, personally, but it's not wrong to do so), I'd suggest simple italics.

The second point is ellipses - watch overusing them, especially within dialogue and in places where the character says nothing ("..."). For example, the section '"..." Eratria remained silent-'. The phrase 'Eratria remained silent' already tells us '...' - having both is redundant. In pretty much all cases, the "..." doesn't really mean anything, and can be inferred from the surrounding text. I'd also recommend watching its use in dialogue. In most cases it doesn't add anything, and even when used to show how the person is speaking, it can often be inferred anyway (such as with Marina). Getting technical, an ellipses simply means a pause, not a trailing off - if the full sentence has been uttered, end with a '.' or ','. Also, if the character isn't going to finish the sentence, the elipses is followed by a period, for four dots total '...'

Anyway, I'm very glad to see you update this, and I think this chapter was very well done. I don't have any suggestions to add besides the few nitpicks. Was great to see that Eratria isn't invincible, and I loved Edy's mad dash back, along with her dialogues with Ramona over the radios. Again, I also love the bickering between Eratria and Remy. Edy was once again the standout here, though.

Future chapters look interesting - a bunker defense, and what looks to be the makings of a sniper duel. I can dig that. Looking forward to more.

Alright. There we go. K liked the extra insight there. Nice work on getting into their minds. The only questionable thing I saw was using bold for emphasis. It's. A bit assailting kn the eyes. Otherwise good stuff. As said 8'm not a huge edy fan, but her cAlling EratriA a bitch was gold. She's a straight out cunt and got what was coming. And this chapter was also awesome because... I mean, come on. It's Remmy Fuckin' Linton. Whatever happens, you're giving a good story, and I'm more concerned with characters I like having a good story than I am of their well being or anything else. So far you've delivered there, so props, bru. Props. Keep showing those Imp SOBs what's what! F'in A!

Ahhh...cliff hangers...that's just too good of a place to put one. No choice but to wait though.

It's been a while, hasn't it..anyway, the fighting is finally getting heated again and more familiar faces showing up, that's always fun. Not to mention they get to fight a beefed-up Ty...

Agh, dammit. Cliffhangered. Though, I'm greatly resisting asking for Eratria to cameo in a crossover fic long enough to get her head lopped off by a Spetznas grunt (if such a thing exists!)

By and large, this is a pretty well-written fic. While I'm, I confess, quite new to the fandom, and you've been disappeared for longer than I've been here, I read through this all the way up to 14, and can say I enjoyed it. The mix of drama, canon and romance, and greatly envy your abilities. Perhaps at some point, I can emulate them.

One thing does bother me. As another reviewer said, Eratria does seem to be pretty Sueish. A complete and total bitch, but a bit of a sue none the less. Not as grating as prior examples, since this seems to be the villain, but her uncanny ability to deflect bullets only makes me want to light her up with a flamethrower on a particularly large main battle tank from another game.

Though, I doubt you can kill Edy. If you killed her, I don't think you could finish the story (it is, after all, called the "EDY Detachment", not the "Ramona" or "Elysse Detachment"), but you've got me sitting on the edge of my seat. Put Chapter 15 up soon, please.

-RedShocktrooper

Well we know half of what she is - the other half is still unknown. A mix between two opposites could be interesting, so long as, again, she doesn't take center stage (though of course, that's all just my own preference - continue on with her as you feel would best fit the story).

Still, by far the best parts of this chapter where when you were getting into the actual characters heads - both Edy worrying about her friends and dealing with her fatigue, then her bit at the very end, and Ramona leading the detachment in her absence. You're great at getting into the characters' heads when you do it - do it all the time!

I liked this chapter quite a bit more than the last one - it was great seeing the units defending the line without Eratria's help. Though the revelation of half of her heritage was an important point, I was more interested in Edy's reactions to it than what it meant about the character herself. Again, you did a good job of showing Edy's thoughts there. Keep that up. Same with the very end. I'm looking forward to see how this ends! Hopefully not horribly *shudder*