Maybe a little bit confusing, but overall, is a nice story!

This was great! I really liked the way that you used all those descriptive words though, it made it come to life in my imagination, and how you introduced/talked about the other members. You ended it pretty well too, but does Demyx ever figure it out (in your mind)? Anyways, good job! :D

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I do believe that I've sent his on DeviantArt, right?

Ah well, it's just as amazing now as it was the first time reading it. The only thing I can say is you might want to try some more spacing- it comes in very handy in conveying moods sometimes and it makes it easier for others to read your work. Other than that, you got both Xigbar and Demyx perfectly in charater, and this was insanely fun to read. Keep writing!